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This exchange lacks any kind of personality, energy, or uniqueness. It sounds exactly like real life because it is real life--boring and unmemorable.
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This exchange lacks any kind of personality, energy, or uniqueness. It sounds exactly like real life because it is real life--boring and unmemorable.
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>How would you fix the bad example?
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Here's my revised version:
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Mike looked up from his computer. "Sally, do you want to come over and watch a movie tonight?"
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She leaned against the doorjamb. "What movie?"
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"You know, that new action flick with the guy who used to be on TV."
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"Oh, I like him!" She grinned. "I'm in."
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He smiled back. "Great. How about seven o'clock?"
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"That works for me."
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"See ya then."
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