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## Some companies block their employees from using social media network
In many corporations, despite its rules, staff cannot access social media platforms like Facebook, Twitter, and Instagram during working time. Personally, I totally agree with that decision. Indeed, prohibiting employees from using social me... | mrhuyprono1 | Feb 4, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/toeic-part-companies-block-employees-94160/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
The presentation is not grammatically perfect but works for the purpose of the writer. While there are some incorrect phrases and references used in the essay, it does not deter the reader from understanding the opinion of the writer. The fact that he uses public knowledge as references works well for the presentation.... | Holt | Feb 4, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/toeic-part-companies-block-employees-94160/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
***Some people believe that the personal information of violent criminals should be made available to the public. Others think that this information should be protected.***
## Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is a common belief that violent criminals' identities should be kept confiden... | Heo Nguyen | Jan 28, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/violent-criminals-information-made-94135/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
It is a common belief
A "common belief" cannot be used as an alternate reference to "Some people believe". The reason? When you say "common" it indicates, by definition; an adjective that refers to a universal, widespread, or general knowledge. The "universal" aspect of the definition contradicts the "some" reference... | Holt | Jan 28, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/violent-criminals-information-made-94135/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
Regarding the introduction, it is my view that you should not mention your personal opinion since this essay is the "discuss both views" type. Instead, you could write "There is indeed a strong case to be made for both sides which will be discussed now", then mention your viewpoints later in the conclusion (the last pa... | Camtu25 | Jan 28, 2023 | 2 | https://essayforum.com/writing/violent-criminals-information-made-94135/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
***Governments should spend more money on medical research to protect citizen's health rather than on protecting the environment.***
## Do you agree or disagree?
There is an opinion that more state funding should be allocated to clinical research than for tackling environmental problems. Personally, I wholehea... | Camtu25 | Feb 3, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/state-investment-medical-research-94157/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## Food advertising should be banned the same as smoking is
Some researchers contend that the habit of eating too much will pose a threat to peoples' health and thus, suggest that food commercials should be banned the same way as cigarettes are. This essay will disagree with the latter view, and justifications a... | trananhthu686 | Feb 1, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/food-advertising-banned-same-smoking-94154/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
It would have been nice if you could have used alternate terms for "researchers" since it is still close enough to the original term used (research). By using alternate words such as analysts or food scientists, you would have shown a wider and related vocabulary to the examiner, thus boosting your LR score at the very... | Holt | Feb 1, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/food-advertising-banned-same-smoking-94154/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
@Holt
Thank you for your response! | trananhthu686 | Feb 1, 2023 | 2 | https://essayforum.com/writing/food-advertising-banned-same-smoking-94154/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
***The best way to teach children to cooperate is through team sports at school.***
## Agree or Disagree?
Being one of the major core skills in today's era of integration, cooperation has recently been brought into education. While advocates of team sports are of the opinion that these activities provide the b... | splitude198 | Feb 2, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/opinion-teamwork-spirit-honed-team-sports-94155/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
The actual discussion of the topic should not be done in the first paragraph as you did here. Any personal opinions and insights should only be presented in this paragraph as a part of the writer's opinion thesis. This should have been a 2 sentence presentation that focused only on an accurate prompt restatement and yo... | Holt | Feb 2, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/opinion-teamwork-spirit-honed-team-sports-94155/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
Hi, I saw this interesting IELTS question many weeks ago and i finished it for about 35 minutes. Please give me feedback for further improvement.
Question:
## Scientists predict that in the future cars will be driven by computers
.
***What are the reasons behind this? Is it a positive or negative development?... | nguyenana611 | Feb 1, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/scientists-predict-future-cars-driven-94152/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
While the essay is extremely wordy and actually shows off your vast English vocabulary, the focus on word exercise rather than coherence, cohesiveness, and a proper response to the 2nd question in the prompt are the reasons that this essay will receive a failing score. The speed by which you wrote the essay was not com... | Holt | Feb 1, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/scientists-predict-future-cars-driven-94152/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## vehicle registrations graph
**Essay topics:**
**The graph below shows changes in the share of vehicle registrations of the three most common types of commercial vehicles in the US between 1970 and 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where r... | ruy | Jan 30, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/rate-vehicle-registrations-three-common-94150/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
There are actually 2 graph images to be identified in this image. In no particular order, the presentation contains a basic line graph and a dotted line graph. It is important to differentiate between the two images due to the measurement references being made. The line graph is continuous, while the dotted line graph ... | Holt | Jan 30, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/rate-vehicle-registrations-three-common-94150/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
Hi. I'm glad to have someone review my writing. Please give me some feedback and thank you!
## sales of jeans graph
The graph depicts the predicted sales of jeans in Turkey of Mango Co and Jack & Jones Co company in the following year. Transactions are measured in thousands of jean pairs.
Generally spe... | dynamite101 | Jan 29, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/wtiting-bar-chart-shows-estimated-sales-jeans-94143/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
The essay is too long to be completed within 20 minutes. Aim to write only 200 words as this is the ideal number that will allow for a quick and almost complete analysis within the time frame provided.
The graph
Always aim for clarity in your descriptions. Since this is a combined columnar and line graph, descri... | Holt | Jan 29, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/wtiting-bar-chart-shows-estimated-sales-jeans-94143/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## The line chart report
The line chart given denotes the proportion of people settled in Australia who were given birth in Asia, the UK, and other regions.
In general, the percentage of people living in Australia who were born in Asia and other areas saw an upward trend. On the other hand, there was a dramati... | millbucksgurl | Jan 28, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/graph-gives-information-percentage-people-94141/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
who were given birth
This does not make sense, the people could have been born in Asia, their parents gave birth in Asia, but neither were ever "given birth" in Asia. Incorrect grammar / word usage will result in lowered LR and GRA scores at the very start of the scoring considerations. That is not a good sign. Faili... | Holt | Jan 28, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/graph-gives-information-percentage-people-94141/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
@Holt
thank you for correcting my mistakes | millbucksgurl | Jan 28, 2023 | 2 | https://essayforum.com/writing/graph-gives-information-percentage-people-94141/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## formal complaint to retaurant
You have eaten at a restaurant and it was such a terrible experience that you have decided to inform the manager by letter of what happened and that you want your money back. Things to include:
- Facts. You need to be concise but explain what happened.
- Polite. No one res... | bbqguy | Jan 27, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/formal-complaint-retaurant-94130/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
The discussion paragraphs are not complete. There should still be 4 paragraphs in this presentation because of the following discussion reasons:
1. A proper introduction that indicates the name of the restaurant, the date, and the time of the visit. You may also include the name of the host and waiter assigned if ... | Holt | Jan 27, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/formal-complaint-retaurant-94130/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
@Holt
Thanks for your comment, your points are critical and I realized I do missunderstood the topic requirements on point No.2. I was thought it requred me to be polite because no one responds to insulting letter. And I have noticed that you highlighted my present and past tense usage, do you mind elaborate more abo... | bbqguy | Jan 27, 2023 | 2 | https://essayforum.com/writing/formal-complaint-retaurant-94130/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## abortion on demand
One of those issues that have concerned law makers is whether female citizens are allowed to make their own decisions in relation to abortion or the governments should intervene for mental and physical health of them. While there are those opposing abortion on demand for moral reasons, I be... | DaisyJk | Jan 28, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/academic-paper-abortion-demand-94139/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
The first two paragraphs that you have written are bordering on incoherent. The thoughts being presented are a jumbled mess due to the improper sentence structuring and word usage in the paragraphs. Only the last paragraph makes sense to a certain extent as I suspect that it is more of a cut and paste job from an uncit... | Holt | Jan 28, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/academic-paper-abortion-demand-94139/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## Percentage of adults by age group
The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different ages in the UK who used the Internet every day from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture depicts the proportion of da... | lethacquang | Jan 28, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/percentage-adults-different-age-94134/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
The picture
This is an incorrect identifier. This is not a picture. The task 1 essay requires you to identify the measurement type image. In this case, this is a columnar bar chart. This is different from the row bar chart that is a variation of the same image.
In addition, teenagers used the Internet the most a... | Holt | Jan 28, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/percentage-adults-different-age-94134/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
Thanks for your checking | lethacquang | Jan 28, 2023 | 2 | https://essayforum.com/writing/percentage-adults-different-age-94134/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## The best way to teach children to cooperation is through team sports
An opinion usually heard these days is that the best idea to make youngsters more collaborative is through team sports. From my perspective, I do agree with this notion despite some concerns with the other suggestions that I will mention in ... | trinhxuanbach | Jan 25, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/best-way-teach-children-cooperation-team-94127/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
The response you have used in this presentation is incorrect. While it appears that you are giving a degree of measured response through the use of the word "despite", it does not actually accomplish the clarity of opinion in the presentation. You indicate that you agree with the opinion, but failed to indicate to what... | Holt | Jan 25, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/best-way-teach-children-cooperation-team-94127/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
***Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees worked from home instead of traveling to a workplace every day.***
## Do you think the advantages of working from home outweigh the disadvantages ?
With the development of the technology, there are many alternative ways for individuals selecting ... | djjockey1205 | Jan 24, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/working-home-efficient-travelling-94124/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
Rather than referring to the opinion you support as "it", use a more specific term based on the keyword provided. This will add clarity and accuracy to your opinion as needed by the preliminary score. By the way, watch out for the time reference errors. The past tense references cannot be used in a task 2 essay unless ... | Holt | Jan 24, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/working-home-efficient-travelling-94124/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
Thanks for replying my writing task | djjockey1205 | Jan 24, 2023 | 2 | https://essayforum.com/writing/working-home-efficient-travelling-94124/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
***Spoken communication is more powerful than written communication.***
## To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is an opinion that oral communication is more effective than written word. Personally, I wholeheartedly disagree with this statement and this essay will give some points below.
One mig... | Camtu25 | Jan 17, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/oral-communication-effective-written-94109/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
Your prompt restatement is accurate as it refers to an opinion stated by someone else as a fact, rather than you stating that it is a fact. Good job. Your opinion presentation is very good and uses the correct measured response. The problem with the presentation? It lacks the thesis statement. What is the short form of... | Holt | Jan 17, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/oral-communication-effective-written-94109/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## technology at school
Using technology as educational tools has a variety of advantages such as helping students more easily approach information, learning with multiple styles and promoting working together. Firstly, since the internet developed, it has changed the way students' study and research from only b... | Conann | Jan 17, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/benefits-use-technology-school-body-94110/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
The task 2 essay requires a 2-3 body paragraph depending upon the writing instructions. It appears to me that this discussion is based upon a single opinion essay, so the reasoning presentations should cover no more than 2 parts. However, this presentation is only a single discussion format. Reading through the paragra... | Holt | Jan 17, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/benefits-use-technology-school-body-94110/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
THIS IS MY FIRST TIME WRITING AN ESSAY SO HELP ME !!! Any feedback is appreciated.
## 3. Tell us about (up to) five activities or accomplishments
***in one or more of the following areas:***
Athletics:
Member of my school's sports team as a goalkeeper in Handball, football, and floorball and as a centre... | jkarmie | Jan 13, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/ubc-activities-accomplishments-part-94096/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
Athletics
This lacks a clear accomplishment reference. What you should be enumerating are the number of timer the teams you captained won, any MVP awards you received for team participation, or any other recognition you may have received owing to your position as team captain. This does not infer actual achievements ... | Holt | Jan 13, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/ubc-activities-accomplishments-part-94096/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
@Holt
Thank you for your feedback. Actually, I wrote a pretty long explanation but had cut down thinking it would be long. For a Short Description, how many Maximum characters should be okay to include? | jkarmie | Jan 13, 2023 | 2 | https://essayforum.com/writing/ubc-activities-accomplishments-part-94096/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
Hello, looking for general feedback on this research essay and three areas of weakness in the paper. Thanks
## The Federal Reserve and the Strength of the U.S Economy: A Research Paper
The Federal Reserve and the Strength of the U.S Economy
With inflation running rampant around the world and the streng... | jos2250 | Jan 8, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/research-federal-reserve-feed-back-94075/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
Create a stronger opening statement and thesis presentation by removing the cited sources within the first paragraph. As a rule, this part should only contain your insights and assumptions as these will be discussed in the next paragraphs. Outline the discussion path here with the thesis statement. Just introduce every... | Holt | Jan 8, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/research-federal-reserve-feed-back-94075/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
I think the introduction could use a bit of work as it goes too much into detail and does not highlight the thesis and insight. | nataliasadhwani | Jan 8, 2023 | 2 | https://essayforum.com/writing/research-federal-reserve-feed-back-94075/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
**The question:**
Write about the following topic:
***Society today pays less attention to women's sports than to men's sports.
## Why is this the case? Is this a positive or negative trend?***
*Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at leas... | Sunny0629 | Jan 6, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/women-sports-receive-attention-men-94065/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
The topic interpretation and your point of view should stand alone in the paragraph. You will automatically receive a failing mark for that section in this presentation As you proceeded to discuss your opinion in the same paragraph. All explanatory and reasoning paragraphs must come after the restatement and opinion se... | Holt | Jan 6, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/women-sports-receive-attention-men-94065/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
Essay Title:
***It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age.
Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.
## To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teac... | nerdypmns | Jan 11, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/learning-right-wrong-punishment-94092/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
The first major reason that this essay will fail is that you did not follow the writing requirements. You were asked for the extent of your dis/agreement and what sort of punishments teachers and parents can apply to erring students and children. Not only did you fail to deliver a measured response, you also altered th... | Holt | Jan 11, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/learning-right-wrong-punishment-94092/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
@Holt
Thank you so much ! I'll improve it ! | nerdypmns | Jan 11, 2023 | 2 | https://essayforum.com/writing/learning-right-wrong-punishment-94092/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
Topic:
***When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration.***
## To what extent do you agree or disagree?
My essay
It is true that many people now decide to choose their job only based on the income they get. However, I do not agree with this idea since there are myriad factors that ... | Johndavisvu | Jan 11, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/salary-key-thing-consider-choosing-job-94091/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
The prompt itself does not ask you to consider the truth behind the presented discussion point. Therefore, to do so in the restatement is a scoredown. You did not keep to the given discussion. You added a claim that is not required nor found in the original. It has made the restatement inaccurate.
A writer's opini... | Holt | Jan 11, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/salary-key-thing-consider-choosing-job-94091/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
**The question:**
Write about the following topic:
***Research suggests that many prisoners commit crimes again after being released from prison.
WHAT ARE THE CAUSES OF THIS? SUGGEST SOME SOLUTIONS.***
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write ... | Sunny0629 | Jan 7, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/causes-solutions-reoffending-94066/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
could someone please tell me the approximate score of this essay
Contact me privately for comprehensive scoring services. It is not part of our free review offering anymore.
The standard format of a task 2 essay is 4 paragraphs unless it is a discuss both views and give your opinion presentation. In which case t... | Holt | Jan 7, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/causes-solutions-reoffending-94066/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## population in japan
The question:
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
***The table below shows the Japanese population by different age groups from 1970 to 2040.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.***
You should write... | Sunny0629 | Jan 7, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/demographic-change-japan-94069/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
The number one requirement of this task is the ability of the writer to say what he means clearly using the best descriptive words possible, while using actual data from the image. This is a quick analysis presentation. It does notrequire indirect then direct references. State the data in the paragraph, not in the pare... | Holt | Jan 7, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/demographic-change-japan-94069/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
@Holt Thanks for you help, that's really helpful for me. Have a nice day! | Sunny0629 | Jan 7, 2023 | 2 | https://essayforum.com/writing/demographic-change-japan-94069/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## WATER USAGE diagram
***The chart below shows the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.***
**Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.**
The diagram displays the percentage of water usage for several ... | calicoshafira | Jan 9, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/charts-show-percentage-water-used-different-94081/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
It would help you improve your Task 1 writing style if you refer to other examples with regards how to write it and how to better identify the images presented. Your essay is a non passing one at this point because it does not meet the writing requirements of the task. I guess you are self studying which is why you mad... | Holt | Jan 9, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/charts-show-percentage-water-used-different-94081/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
@Holt thank you for your advice, I will try to read more and do better next time. | calicoshafira | Jan 9, 2023 | 2 | https://essayforum.com/writing/charts-show-percentage-water-used-different-94081/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## phones ban at schools
In the ever-changing world, when technology and digital devices are playing a prominent role in people's lives, current children are believed to be the earliest generation to approach and grow up with these devices. When adults supposed that in the school, phones or tablets should be for... | huongggtra | Jan 4, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/children-banned-using-phones-school-day-94053/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
This is an essay that requires 2 comparison points and several writer's opinion in its discussion development. Based on the way the restatement was presented along with the opinion s the response should have covered 3 paragraphs in the following format:
Par. 2: 1st public opinion reasoning + writer's point of view... | Holt | Jan 4, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/children-banned-using-phones-school-day-94053/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
Your essay looks great but you can also mention countries like India and China where phones are banned and they are excelling in education. | SunilPal | Jan 4, 2023 | 2 | https://essayforum.com/writing/children-banned-using-phones-school-day-94053/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
@Holt @SunilPal many thanks | huongggtra | Jan 4, 2023 | 3 | https://essayforum.com/writing/children-banned-using-phones-school-day-94053/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
This essay presents a balanced view on the use of phones in schools. it acknowledges the potential distractions and negative impacts that phones can have on students, but also points out the potential benefits that educational apps and social media can provide. The suggestion to involve parents in discussions about pho... | glowstorm | Jan 4, 2023 | 4 | https://essayforum.com/writing/children-banned-using-phones-school-day-94053/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## Internally young forever
Todays culture seems to be obsessed with looking younger, weather it's getting Botox, laser treatments, elective surgery or Viagra. But, what if we could actually be younger internally? Can we preserve or reverse our aging process deep in our DNA and cells? Well, maybe not like Benjamin ... | Dreamgirl01 | Jan 9, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/internally-young-forever-blue-zone-states-94078/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
some scientist
Some is a plural adjective so it cannot be used with a singular reference. Use the indefinite article "a" instead to refer to a singular/ particular number. Change "believe" to the correct third-person singular simple present indicative form "believes" to complete the grammar correction in that part. ... | Holt | Jan 9, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/internally-young-forever-blue-zone-states-94078/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## export earnings (2015-2016)
The bar chart illustrates the export earnings of the USA from five different products. The table below shows the percentage change in values for five different products.
Generally speaking, except for the case of gems and jewelry and agricultural products, all the surveyed cat... | thuyne | Jan 8, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/chart-shows-value-one-country-exports-various-94077/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
Always remember that this report is written on the assumption that the reader does not have a copy of the image on hand. Therefore, using image locations in the statement is useless. That is an incorrect writing format that will result in deductions. As the writer, you are expected to deliver the image information with... | Holt | Jan 8, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/chart-shows-value-one-country-exports-various-94077/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## children Discipline
Should children be imparted self-monitoring by their biological parents or should the government shoulder this responsibility on account of school discipline proved ineffective in contemporary epoch? In this essay, I shall discuss both sides of this controversial issue prior to going on to... | jimmy1104 | Jan 8, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/discipline-growing-problem-modern-schools-94073/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
Your restatement is confusing to read. To be honest, it is not even remotely close to the original discussion topic. Even your personal opinion in so disconnected from the instructions and discussion bases that it does not meet task requirements. The preliminary score of this essay is on the failing side because of the... | Holt | Jan 8, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/discipline-growing-problem-modern-schools-94073/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults
In recent years, the population of young adults has been far higher than that of elderly people in some countries. This trend may be advantageous to some extent, but I am of the opinion that its drawbacks are eclipsed by its b... | ghadtj | Jan 7, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/population-young-adults-far-higher-elderly-94068/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
There is a redundancy existing in your opinion statement. The double presentation of your openion in a single sentence led to a confusing idea presentation. The fust half of the sentence is already clear and only required the short reasoning topics to support it. The last half of the statement was the correct response ... | Holt | Jan 7, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/population-young-adults-far-higher-elderly-94068/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## the impact of music
Music plays an indispensable part in many aspects of people's lives. While many point out that helping people relieve stress is the most crucial role of music, I disagree with this idea because I believe that music has other equally important functions including driving people's productivi... | ABC2519 | Dec 25, 2022 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/important-function-music-helps-people-93989/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
When asked to write an extent response, do your best to actually quantify your response with a type of emotional measurement. Do not use a basic dis/agree response because that in an incomplete response and will only be partially scored. Indicate a reference to a full, strong, or partial measurement to your dis/agreeme... | Holt | Dec 25, 2022 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/important-function-music-helps-people-93989/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
I am also studying for the IELTS, and I can hardly imagine a candidate who can write a 440 word essay in 40 minutes and give such a professional explanation (the type of explanation I can only see in research reports). I might not even spell 'cortisol' correctly in the real exam. In fact, the IELTS writing test does no... | Sunny0629 | Dec 25, 2022 | 2 | https://essayforum.com/writing/important-function-music-helps-people-93989/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## TASK II QUESTION
In some parts of the world it is becoming popular to research the history of one's own family. why might people want to do this? is it a positive or negative development?
Conducting research regarding their own family is more popular as this can attract hereditary diseases from family membe... | YETI YUNIARSIH | Jan 1, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/regarding-world-becoming-popular-research-94026/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
Since this a task 2 essay , it should meet the 250 minimum word requirement. Writing only 198 words will result in an overall failing score since the lacking word count will result in applicable task score reduction. The writer appears to be currently unfamiliar with Task 2 writing requirements so he should familiarize... | Holt | Jan 1, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/regarding-world-becoming-popular-research-94026/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
I'm not going to judge your performance in TA, LR and CC. Holt has already made a comprehensive assessment, and my understanding of the other three is not comprehensive. I will only talk about your grammar mistakes.
1. You need to be aware of some formatting issues, including capitalizing the first letter of the f... | Sunny0629 | Jan 1, 2023 | 2 | https://essayforum.com/writing/regarding-world-becoming-popular-research-94026/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
***Nowadays, an increasing number of people with health problems are using alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their normal doctor.***
## Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
In recent years, it has become far more normal for people with health problems not to visit the... | hoaflth | Jan 2, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/using-alternative-medicines-treatments-94036/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
The writer was on point with his topic rewording. It was close to the ouginal even though the sentence structure is incorrect. Never combine 2 sets of information in one sentence. That is definitely a deduction point. Then, the writer did not provide a clear single opinion for the presentation. Since the option given f... | Holt | Jan 2, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/using-alternative-medicines-treatments-94036/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
I didn't find any grammatical mistakes in your paper. Great!
Your section structure is reasonable, but it should be noted that informal acronym like **'don't'** are not accepted in academic papers such as IELTS writing. You can change it to **'do not'**.
I hope my answer will be helpful to you. Have a nice day! | Sunny0629 | Jan 2, 2023 | 2 | https://essayforum.com/writing/using-alternative-medicines-treatments-94036/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
***Scientific research should be carried out by the governments rather than private companies***
## agree or disagree?
Some people enunciate the idea that government should be supervised and handled by the authority rather than private companies. I concur with this opinion because the government can have profo... | Huynguyen123232 | Jan 2, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/government-supervised-handled-authority-94038/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
A task 2 essay assesses the everyday English vocabulary of the test taker. While having a wide vocabulary is good for the LR score, the use of advanced, profession specific vocabulary tends to lower the LR score so using
enunciate
and
concur
did not help the essay score. It does not feel natural to read... | Holt | Jan 2, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/government-supervised-handled-authority-94038/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
There are some grammatical mistakes in your paper:
1.the article before the noun cannot be omitted, so it is better to put an article like 'the' before the noun 'government'.
2.And in the last sentence of the second paragraph, perhaps accidentally, did this 'pf' mean 'for'?
3.In the third paragraph, should it be ... | Sunny0629 | Jan 2, 2023 | 2 | https://essayforum.com/writing/government-supervised-handled-authority-94038/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## the transformation of shopping
***In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby.***
In recent days, shopping is not considered as a responsibility anymore. Otherwise, it has increasingly become a leisure activity that people are really into. I do believe that t... | lyphung | Jan 4, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/recent-days-shopping-considered-94047/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
The essay will immediately receive a failing preliminary score. The writer has not followed the writing instruction as provided. He actually changed the writing instruction from the orginal single opinion essay to a comparative discussion instruction. While the writer did provide an opinion, it is not the correct or ex... | Holt | Jan 4, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/recent-days-shopping-considered-94047/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## percentage of deaths by gender due to the covid-19 disease
The bar chart visualizes Covid-19 diseases attack both sexes, and the majority of people dying because of it are men rather than women in several countries. Overall, men in Italy and Denmark are far higher dying than women due to Covid-19 diseases, wh... | zeed22 | Jan 1, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/men-dying-covid-women-94027/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
While the word count was properly met in the presentation, the correct page formatting was not applied so formatting dedu,ctions will need to be reflected in the score. Sentence structuring is also off based on incorrect grammar, punctuation and confusing thought presentations. GRA deductions could very well result in ... | Holt | Jan 1, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/men-dying-covid-women-94027/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## Guitar Makes a Comeback to Pop Music
The guitar is making a comeback to popular music. As of recent, there have been many people learning guitar. Since the COVID-19 pandemic, people have picked up the guitar as a new hobby. And some are also starting to write songs. As of late, many songs in the charts today ... | Eddward | Jan 1, 2023 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/guitar-makes-comeback-pop-music-94024/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
The essay would also benefit from more popular song mentions in relation to guitar use a rhythm basis. You are assuming too much that the person reading this paper will have a music background. That may notalways be the case. Always consider the non-musician point of view who may need some hand holding or simpler expla... | Holt | Jan 1, 2023 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/guitar-makes-comeback-pop-music-94024/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
This is my practice for the IELTS Writing Task 2
***Nowadays, many university students choose to study overseas for part or all of their courses.
Some people say this should be encouraged because it is beneficial for students and the universities they attend.
## Do you agree or disagree with this view?***
... | chlyee | Dec 31, 2022 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/ietls-encouraging-studying-overseas-94017/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
Do not alter the orginal discussion foundation by presenting your opinion in the first paragraph that will make it fail the prompt restatement requirements. The paragraph is expected to state the given discussion points using as close a synonym as possible to represent the original idea. You did not actually do that in... | Holt | Dec 31, 2022 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/ietls-encouraging-studying-overseas-94017/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
The structure of your writing is good. You have an argument and example in both paragraphs. However, you put too many examples in one section and your argument is not strong enough to convince. | tuanb2610 | Dec 31, 2022 | 2 | https://essayforum.com/writing/ietls-encouraging-studying-overseas-94017/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## the ages of the populations of oman and spain
The given circle charts give information about population age ratios in 2005 and predictions for 2055 in two different countries namely Oman and Spain.
Overall, the initial impression is that both surveyed countries recorded the top proportion of the aging popul... | HanNguyen4869 | Dec 19, 2022 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/oman-spain-population-age-ratios-predictions-93966/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
Kindly use accurate terminology when describing the provided image. While circle charts are an acceptable alternative descriptor, it is not a proper academic reference. While it is often advised that synonyms be used, restating the original image reference will be better accepted and scored.
It is also imperative ... | Holt | Dec 19, 2022 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/oman-spain-population-age-ratios-predictions-93966/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
- "Predictive data accurately half a century later " this phrase is so long and vague => You should change into "Predicted data"
- " the given circle charts" ==> the given pie charts is more accurate
- instead of give, you could use depict, indicate.
- "Moreover, while the rate...working age" ==> comma should be ... | nataliely | Dec 19, 2022 | 2 | https://essayforum.com/writing/oman-spain-population-age-ratios-predictions-93966/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## **The graph below shows the percentage of population in cities since 1970s with projection to 2030.**
The given line chart compares the proportion of people living in cities in 4 countries, namely USA, Korea, China and India, from 1970 to the prediction in 2030.
Overall, the city population in all nation... | yenvoo | Dec 22, 2022 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/percentage-population-cities-93976/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
A clear summary overview will depend upon the number of sentences used to enumerate the graph information. That means the use of individual sentences to indicate each bit of information will score much better in terms of C+C and GRA than a single sentence composed of 3 information presentations. Rather than scoring up,... | Holt | Dec 22, 2022 | 1 | https://essayforum.com/writing/percentage-population-cities-93976/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
**"was on an increase and continuously was predicted to grow"** in the second paragraph should be rewritten short and simple. It also had the redundancy fault while having the same meaning word: increase and grow up in the same sentences. It could be rewrite as "Overall, the city population globally was predicted to in... | hanablaaaa | Dec 22, 2022 | 2 | https://essayforum.com/writing/percentage-population-cities-93976/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
- You use some words many time.
+ increase : rise / a rise, climb/ a climb, grow/ a growth, rocket to.
- "was on an increase and continuously was predicted to grow" : this sentence is vague and difficult to understand. You should delete the word continuously.
- paragraph 3 should contain some comparison, not just... | nataliely | Dec 22, 2022 | 3 | https://essayforum.com/writing/percentage-population-cities-93976/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
## not healthy today's lifestyle compared to the past
The circumstances during the previous century were relatively more healthful than at present, I have to concur. The rapid technological advancements, urbanization and digitalization have negatively impacted the average person's physical and psychological heal... | Zhani | Dec 23, 2022 | 0 | https://essayforum.com/writing/life-unhealthier-past-century-agree-93983/ | essayforum.com_writing_ |
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