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you forgot about SUSsuro (but i guess AK players just don't see a difference between them and confusing her with a Suzuran) | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Akeboshi Himari. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Honestly I would prefer the Arius squad as the collab parts, Rhodes would be able to teach them along Projeckt Red and the other child soldiers how to reintegrate to society properly and give them actual education along some friends that might understand them. If not Mika just so there can be more balans. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Oh yeah, that's the one | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
And I'm among them. Let the world burn!😈 | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Ohhhhh so that's why I saw so many twits saying that they should cancel PM because they are from 4chan. Now I'm even more of a Project Moon fan. Certified This is this and That is that moment | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
We pissed off Project Moon twitter(I may be a PM fan but please don't lump us with twittards), now let's piss off Arknights twitter, and finally for the ultimate collab we get Azur Lane, Blue Archive and Arknights | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
I tire so much of different websites forming their little in-groups and just wanting to piss each other off. Are we all still 15? | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Please i need Defender Hoshino in the game | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Honestly I blame the writer for that one | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Funny ntr and chucking is from cn..... Just why | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Lmao 😂😂😂 | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Literally, trying to drive away the fans that were there when PM was relatively unknown is just dumb. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-17-08 |
the shit CN pulls makes me ashamed to be chinese lmao. Thank god i dont live there. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-20-08 |
Now, Mostima is one of the operators where the sex will COMPLETELY depend on the trust you have with her. She has horns and she is horny.
Low trust: You have to find her first.
Medium to high trust: let's say you are out for casual sex and somehow got her to have sex with you, unless you are an experienced Dokutah, and by experience I mean having a foursome with Sui sisters, satisfying all of them and then living to tell the tale level of experience you're not going to fuck her, SHE is going to fuck you. Good luck, you're going to get absolutely womanhandled.
Sex with her is going to start with her teasings. She will slowly and endlessly tease you saying remarks like "Wow, who knew Doctor of Rhodes Island was a virgin" and "Do you like what you see, hm?" while slowly taking off her pants. Regardless of her experience, she is somehow very good at sex, her teasings involve slowly taking off her clothes, licking and nibbling your ears and necks, dirty talking and even maybe edging.
Now, if you have successfully completed the "edging phase" you insert your dick on her "baby-making organ" She is the type to say "I popped Doctor's cherry" while she has blood dripping from her most private part or says "You moan like a girl, Dokutah." when she goes hard on you. Her favorite position is cowgirl and she will ride you like a buck until you're completely left dry.
If you are an experienced Dokutah she will use her time ability on you to make you cum and tease you that way. If you're such a beast that you don't ejaculate even after her stimulations then she will be left flabbergasted and now you have your chance. You have to take the initiative. You're going to need to start gentle with her, she doesn't like too rough. When you're done with her she will be gasping on the bed and say "Doctor... you're something... else..."
With casual sex when you try to reach for after after sleeping in the same bed you're not going to find her.
Casual Sex: Normally 9/10 but the post-nut clarity hits so hard that it gets dropped to 7/10. Some outcomes have worse post-nut-clarity than others and she might ask you to do it every time before she goes on to her deliveries if she likes it.
+250 trust: Now this is where the good stuff begins. Gaining her complete trust is not an easy task, you will have no shortage of days spent chasing her, having spent time and money for snacks suited for her tastes, taking care of Exusai, and discussing Fiammetta nicknames and escapades after operation only to go on to dine with her only.
You two will not *merely* fuck, you two will become one. And the lewdest the ultimate lewd action ever known to mankind will take place in that. >!**Handholding**. !<
It starts with a deep tongue kissing. Then as you start to take off each other's clothes you hold each other's hands. She will give you the most heartfelt blowjob you ever experienced.
When you tell her you're going to come she will say "So fast... Cum, Doctor." and swallow the load. You have to look at her face to understand that she didn't mean anything bad with that remark "if anything she is happy that she can satisfy you and you can feel her love.
After all, she finally started to feel warmth again and sought for much more. It is almost as if you rekindled her desires. Then you get her ready. After you feel her "love juices" in your hand you start to put it in. She will say "Doctor is inside me..." while having a big smile on her face.
Now, you must have consumed the amount of sanity potions needed, lest you slip a "FALLEN ANGELL PUSS PUSS HITS DIFFERENT" or "PLAP PLAP PLAP GET PREGNANT GET PREGNANT GET PREGNANT" like a dumb fucking fuck. You have to ask "Does it hurt?" it's not the answer you seek, it's the message that you care about her.
Lovey-dovey sex with her is pretty vanilla, You are still in a cowgirl position but she is going slower and her face is reddened. She might hide her breasts with a bra because Apparently "It's embarrassing"
Now, when you're "becoming one" it is very important to keep holding her hand and looking at her face with a smile. You need to look straight into her eyes. You shouldn't look at it as just a "fuck", you have to think of it as conveying your feelings through the use of your various body parts. You continue and she tells you to cum inside and it's a safe day. So you comply and cum inside her. After you come she tightens the grip on your hand and says "Doctors... sperms are inside me."
Now, after sex, she will cuddle with you. You two will be whispering sweet nothings to each other. She will ask you to touch her horns (Congratulations, you have gained horn-touching privilege) and her tail will make it obvious how she feels. You won't have post-nut clarity with this one, you will have post-nut Nirvana.
10000/10 lovey dovey sex. Would recommend. | r/0sanitymemes | post | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-14-08 |
I think it is a bit too long for a sex-review. Also I don't know why but I had it in me to write a story about >!Mostima and Doctor dying together!< and a sex review but still couldn't get myself to continue my story where they two were going to have fun.. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-14-08 |
You cooked, homie!
Also, there is no such thing as a too long sex Review. The next one I'm making is probably going to be a few pages long. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-14-08 |
Thank you, I am currently writing a Doctima fanfic and I think I still haven't really figured out Mostima so it means a lot.
I don't mind other peoples review being too long, it doesn't really bother me, its just my preference. I think the original one was just perfect sex review. Of course I've read the others and they're quite good too. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-14-08 |
I was gonna say these are supposed to be posted only on Thursdays ( if I remember correctly) but since Mostima deserves all the love I'll support this. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-14-08 |
It is already Thursday in most parts of the world. And thank you | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-14-08 |
Oops, sorry for that. And you're welcome fellow Mostima lover. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-14-08 |
Of course, happy to see a fellow Mostima enjoyer liking my post. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-14-08 |
Lets ask a question: does contact with her tongue or saliva paints you blue?like those painting candies or gums? | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-14-08 |
I actually thought about this before, I think if she sees the Doctor wanting to see her with a blue tongue she would paint her tongue blue (with candy or gums etc) beforehand. But it's not something she would do to a low-trust Doctor. And *yes*, it would paint your tongue blue.
Also, she's *definitely* going to tease you about that blue tongue fetish. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-14-08 |
Im blue dabee dee da be da | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-14-08 |
MOISTima | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
the mostimer
wow i really need to write more sesbian lex | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
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(Conclusion) :
I have nightmares. The Abyssal Hunters are all surrounding me inside the deep abyss and showing pointy teeth at me, they draw closer, and closer, ready to swallow me whole, then I instantly wake up. The lights are bright, completely different from both the cave and my nightmare in the abyss. I recognize the medical department of Rhodes Island. Specter is laying on the bed besides me, already awake. She is back to her usual post-amnesia gentle state and watching me with a faint smile.
“Thank you doctor... For making me feel alive again.”
Despite the degrading state I left her in and the utter humiliation I inflicted on her even as she was unconscious, it seems Specter was truly appreciative for what I did. After a while, Gladiia and Skadi enter the room. Skadi was crying a bit, relieved to see both of us alive. Gladiia on the other hand was looking at me like I was an insect ready to be swatted. It seems she had immediately understood what I did to Specter and knowing her subordinate had been completely dominated brought shame to her squad. She coldly congratulated Specter and me for destroying the hideout of seaborns and left. Skadi followed, letting me alone with Specter again. We didn’t talk much as her extraordinary recovery abilities allowed her to be discharged a mere couple hours later.
Alone in my hospital bed, I am writing this review on Miss Laurentina, aka Specter, I’m sorry if this writing is a bit unsteady as my main arm is still recovering. Everything I can say is: do not, and I can’t stress this enough, DO NOT the shark. Miss Specter may appear as an innocent, somehow even slightly fragile smiling woman, but her mental state is way too unpredictable, and unlike her captain who has restraints and “only” wants to humiliate you, Specter will actively try and inflict pain on you, even trying to kill you if you’re not deemed worthy enough. You will absolutely need abnormal strength and a high resistance to the horrors she may try to inflict to your brain before you can even dream of overcoming her sadistic tendencies. She is somehow even more dangerous than Gladiia and by no means should be approached with the intent of sexual intercourse in mind. If she approaches you, flee. If she manages to trap you, do everything you can to escape. If she starts getting violent, show her you can fight, and maybe, just maybe, you will somehow get out of this nightmarish experience, albeit certainly not unscathed, both physically and mentally.
Final rating : shork/10
Source : [https://danbooru.donmai.us/posts/4523871](https://danbooru.donmai.us/posts/4523871) | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-14-08 |
Q&A time :
"What theme did you go for this time ?" As you can see I decided to go for a more horrific / gore theme, I don't want to explore only one genre. It's important for me to improve.
"Improve?" Context : https://www.reddit.com/r/0sanitymemes/comments/1epqaq6/thank_you_a_very_serious_post_trust/
"Continuation of the gladiia fanfic? What is this?" [https://www.reddit.com/r/0sanitymemes/comments/1eesk85/sex\_review\_gladiia\_very\_long/](https://www.reddit.com/r/0sanitymemes/comments/1eesk85/sex_review_gladiia_very_long/)
"When Specter Sex review" - u/[No\_Heat\_5582](https://www.reddit.com/user/No_Heat_5582/) : well there you go
"Why didn't you post the conclusion in the post instead of in the comments" : Reddit limitation. Reddit only allows 40 000 characters.
"How many words was this?" A bit more than 7500, the Gladiia one was a bit less than 6000.
"What do you want to explore next?" Maybe a change in pov would be fine so maybe a femdoc X Mlynar would be interesting.
"Did you touch grass today?" : yes, I walked 5km, for those who use weird metric systems, it means around 3 miles.
"Are you okay?" : No | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-14-08 |
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Glad you enjoyed it! I didn't know I was down bad for this either before I started writing it. I initially intended to go a completely different direction but I'm satisfied enough with the result. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-14-08 |
PLEASE just get a job as a smut writer, these aren’t even pretending to be reviews anymore 😭 (I still thoroughly enjoy them) | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-14-08 |
Ok, a humilation one with glaadia, the most hardcore experience with specter
What about a lovey dovey with skadi? | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-14-08 |
Skadi is definitely something I'm thinking about, though lovey dovey while skadi has fucking isharmla inside her doesn't feel right... Initially I intended this review (is it even a review at this point? I mean the conclusion is but...) to be a completely different topic, basically a psychological breakdown between a dominating specter and a gentle specter the unchained, but I discarded the idea as this seemed a bit inappropriate, so I might use this theme for skadi. (Basically a mix between lovey dovey and mind control. ~~And yes, I'm not even trying to hide my preferences at this point~~) | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Wait, people pay to read smut?
~~hell writing them is more fun~~ | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Then may I suggest a Lovey-Dovey one with Savage :3? Thighs are even thiccer. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Right, that sounds more appropriate.
~~but first, time to roleplay as a female doc getting humiliated with a dog collar and a leash going on a stroll with Mlynar~~ | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
gotta be the best sex review yet | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
>Be me
>Preparing to sleep
>Grab phone to set up alarm.
>Get jumpscared by the notification
See you tomorrow brother. I can't enjoy such a fine meal when I'm this tired. Will definetly try to give you a fair critique.
EDIT: Also MAN. You posted that at midnight? :p | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
BASED AND SHARKPILLED | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Mods! MODS!!! WHERE IS MY ABILITY TO POST MEDIA IN THE COMMENTS!?!? THIS DEGENERACY MUST BE JUDGED!!!
Edit:... It's back... Showtime. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
I got no words, like really, uhhh I can only give you my most sincere applause, to my bookmarks this goes, [and to quote Deadpool ](https://c.tenor.com/mjt1hUgr1TwAAAAC/dead-pool-ryan-reynolds.gif) | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
What about a pushy S.A and C.N.C femdoc? What do you think? | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
I ain't reading allat (yet) but you cooked (probably) | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Keep cooking brother, this is some gourmet shit | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Me when Gladiia or Specter :
https://preview.redd.it/8trrj2hn5rid1.jpeg?width=735&format=pjpg&auto=webp&s=3dfb6b71de76d59c54b80fc3a3c96aaeb2cb4847 | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
"N... No... Please... My ally..."
Mmh SA being pushy feels a bit weird considering how reserved he seems to be, but I'll think about it | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
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Tl;dr : shork seggs dangerous | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
I’ll allow it, keep cooking | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
WHY CAN'T I POST MEDIA FOR MY WOEDS CANNOT DESCRIBE THE FLAVORS OF THIS FULL COURSE MEAL | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Okay nice and also when you say lovy dovy mind control stuff who's on receiving end of it?
Also would include the recent story spoilers to spice this up next Thursday? | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
More like the "h-hey, wait! W-we can talk a little o-ok? P-put back your shirt... err... what is the handcuff for?"
But ok, if you don't like the idea don't worry, I'm no coward
**I'LL DO IT MYSELF!!** | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Jesus Christ this can compete with the works of Slumbrrr, Dueceposter, GrandLeviathan and dare I say it Pheluminar just for the detail in the writing! 10/10 Absolute Cinema. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Doctor is definitely the one getting mind controlled by skadi's voice
What are these spoilers? | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Bruh just tell an AI to read it for you at work or on the way to work | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Double slash for double the cuffing next week, perfect | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Yeah I had finished it around an hour before and was like "might as well" | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
This is litteraly just
https://preview.redd.it/xplghy8zcsid1.png?width=622&format=pjpg&auto=webp&s=be05ed5bd24a69d2a205f4412d38709ca374b58f | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Exactly, shark fucker 69 | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
"i like the kind of woman that could actualy just kill me" | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
if it weren't for improving my writing skills I would only make fanfics about Gladiia, Specter, Qiubai, Degenbrecher, Eblana and Talulah honestly. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Honestly not a bad spread of options | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Never stop cooking OP. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
wasn't about to | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
No. You get the two-for one special today.
https://i.redd.it/8pxgxrzansid1.gif | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
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My weapon is my pen.
...
~~Alright but a little wanking can't do no hurt~~ | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Shut or else Saileach will be next | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
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Someone do Fia! I'm begging, please | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Precursor related spoilers, it makes sharmy and docs relationship even more special. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
wait, what do you mean "do" Fia
https://i.redd.it/5bjgspboqsid1.gif | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
"That" do. But let me go first. Okay, but uhhh, you know, Regs Seview.
https://preview.redd.it/qauvao92rsid1.jpeg?width=720&format=pjpg&auto=webp&s=ea3b4aff96bc1725a625c5bbff302701db595b95 | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
That's it, mind breaking Saileach sex review coming up | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
ngl i'm not very familiar with KFC lore but I can try after I read a bit.
Damn at this point I'm gonna have to release two sex reviews a week. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Peak fiction | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
I’ve always loved my Shark, I brought her to my Rhodes Island pretty early and she was a fantastic carry in my early game days. Her immortality is a great stalling tool and is one of the few operators that constantly heals themselves (adding Perfumer’s passive also helps).
Great design, character and honestly a good backstory. Stultifera Navis helped expand that lore and showed us how her condition is somewhat improving. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Never in my life have i needed something so much and never known until i received it. Thank you for this amazing piece of art | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
O7 | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
laurentina munches on my seaborn til I specter | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Basically this yes | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-15-08 |
Bonjour. (cuz I guess you'll see this this morning :3)
Holy fuck that was exhausting in the best non-lewd way possible.
Okay brother. I will genuinely try to give you as unbiased and as detailed of a critique as I can. Important notes before:
- As you might have surmised from what I write myself, my preference is wholesome, not horror. I will admit that I took several breaks reading this the first time because it was that rough on me.
- Yes, I read it twice.
As such, **my critique might be completely off the mark on multiple points and you're 100% allowed to throw it in the fucking trash if so.** Also, I will refer to unhinged Shork as Specter and sane Shork as Laurentina.
With all that said, I will focus on multiple points I noticed:
- Character wise, I'm ashamed to admit that it didn't click for me that this was a review of OG Specter and not Laurentina until the "DON'T" line. Based on that, **you nailed the return to madness of SHORK in that cave perfectly.** It's by far your best achievement here. Note that I said "In the cave". Not sure if it is intentional or not, and I might VERY WELL be wrong on that point (I'd legit need to reread SN for that), but **her personnality pre-cave is slightly off?** If that was Laurentina, the way she pulled Doc away from the brand is too agressive for her. If Specter, everything else was too restrained. The rest of the characters are perfect. I won't judge Doktah though. All doktahs are different.
- I have a love and hate relationship with **the way you describe things. It's so vivid, so alive,** I can close my eyes and SEE that shit happen. **You get too lost in the descriptions sometimes, though**. Unironically, the boobies description get the worst of this. This combines with the next and most important point, which is both your second greatest achievement, and a possible issue.
- Your punctuation. **You structure some VERY long sentences sometimes, with little to no punctuation, little to no breathing room**. This unironically convinces me you're french because La langue de Molière DOES accomodate for that type of prose way, way better than English does. BUT. While this doesn't help your story at all at first, FUCKING HELL IT WORKS LIKE A CHARM LATER. **As soon as Doc starts fighting back, especially as he drank that water, the way you pace your writing made this shit run at Gladiia speed. It was basically the feeling of being in a rollercoaster as it was going down a MASSIVE slope. That genuinely made the horror and brutality of the whole thing much, MUCH more palpable. Closer. Too close.** I'm not sure if intentional or if it was a deliberate choice, but HOLY FUCK YOU PEAKED THERE. If this wasn't intentional BY ALL THAT IS THICC MAKE IT DELIBERATELY IN THE FUTURE.
- I'm not sure about the mitochondria line and the engis lines, chief. They felt incredibly off in such a violent event. (but they were welcome bubbles of safety in what was a very brutal reading moment.)
- Not gonna judge spelling and shit, I'm not one to talk on that front.
In short: This is a story that I wouldn't have read if I didn't believe that it would be good. This is a story I probably would never ever revisit willingly. **But it was still amazing and if my past self asked me my opinion, I would've told him "READ THIS SHIT WITHOUT A SHRED OF HESITATION. Just, buckle up, it gets rough."** (In case you might feel down reading this, it's the same way I describe Grave of the Fireflies or Silent Hill 2. In Bug land, that's VERY high praise.)
Brother, to stay in the spirit of the sub, PLEASE. Keep cooking. Keep improving. And keep posting. I'm looking forward to more. Even stuff that's more brutal than this. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-16-08 |
OH NO. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-16-08 |
Fia pains me. She's both in the "club of characters I know too little about to do them justice" and the "Club of characters I don't dare touch because I cannot unsee a certain artist take on them and I'm not worthy."
First one because I want to do a review of hers through the eyes of Lemuen and I don't think we know Lem that well yet.
Second one because I want a do a review of hers through the eyes of Mostima and I'm afraid to accidentally mimick Peak Mostima fiction Aka Octodeco.
*Pouts* | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-16-08 |
I'll try and answer all your, and I want to emphasize, valid criticisms :
> Note that I said "In the cave". Not sure if it is intentional or not, and I might VERY WELL be wrong on that point (I'd legit need to reread SN for that), but her personnality pre-cave is slightly off?
No you're completely right, the scenario I had in my mind initially had nothing to do with this, it was about exploring Specter's bipolar nature and using some kind of mindbreaking elements between a gentle Specter the Unchained and an insane Vanilla Specter instead of focusing solely on the insane mental aspect of her, however this scenario was completely discarded after writing around 20% since I thought it was more appropriate for another operator (hum hum, a certain Skadi hum hum) and decided to go for a more fighting, gory horror scenario instead, so if you can see remnants of this, most notably at the begining of the story, you're absolutely right. I should have changed it after I had finished written it but I decided to keep it a bit nonetheless as a way to remind of her bipolar nature just a little. The results on this aspect aren't really there and you're absolutely right for pointing it out.
> You get too lost in the descriptions sometimes,
I was told this before and I admit it's pretty hard writing only 7000 word without adding a lot of details, particularly for a horror scenario since the horror is supposed to come from the uncanny descriptions, it's way easier to describe settings and environments when you have multiple chapters to do so as you can always add details progressively, here in this case I wanted to add just the right amount of details to throw the readers off, I can totally understand if it feels too much however.
> You structure some VERY long sentences sometimes, with little to no punctuation, little to no breathing room.
I try to match the pace of the scenario with the way I write (well, like every good writer does to be honest): when I want the reader to feel a sense of danger I will make the reading stifling by adding lots of commas and dots to simulate a ragged breathing, while during calmer moments I'll try longer descriptions with a slower pace in order to simulate the stillness. I initially wanted to go even further and try a more "stream of conscioussness" type of writing, which seemed particularly fitting since doctor slowly lost his mind there, but I'm clearly not on that level yet and all that is left is the "dialog" between doctor and the seaborns which is usually reduced to one. single. word. after. the. other. (I did try some fantasies though, for example changing the point of view from first to third person with the pronouns in order to make the reader feel more distant from the creature he had himself become, this kind of things). However, it's true I still have to work on my pacing during calmer moments, you're absolutely right.
> It was basically the feeling of being in a rollercoaster as it was going down a MASSIVE slope.
Exactly, until then Doctor was still not a match to Specter so I wanted this to be a turning point.
> That genuinely made the horror and brutality of the whole thing much, MUCH more palpable. Closer. Too close. I'm not sure if intentional or if it was a deliberate choice
Completely deliberate, a famous French movie youtuber once said that horror should be visceral, not instantaneous. The goal was to set a gory settings prior to this point to make the battle way more intense and a way to feel the stakes. That's usually how good horror movies go : an uncanny setting, a trigger to make the horror feel more "alive", then the fighting on this setting. If it worked for you, then good, that was entirely the point.
> I'm not sure about the mitochondria line and the engis lines
Sorry if it wasn't clear, the "architects" line was supposed to be off, as I continued by mentioning Specter's state of delirium on the very next sentence: at that point Specter is hallucinating and starting to see things she wasn't supposed to (due to her reduced breathing and her injuries), even simulating a laughable situation in her head as a last way to resist, though I agree I could have made this clearer or use a less weird comparison and if you didn't understand it's 100% my fault.
The "mitochondria" one was a way to highlight the fact that every cell was on alert at this point up to their very core, however maybe the term was too scientific and I should have stuck with a simpler one, you're absolutely right.
> Not gonna judge spelling and shit, I'm not one to talk on that front.
Woops, teehee *bonks head*
> As you might have surmised from what I write myself, my preference is wholesome, not horror.
I'm keeping this for last since this is not a critique, though I just want to explain things a bit just to give some context: the complete story I'm trying to write is... Clearly not wholesome. It's supposed to be a reflection of various parts of (my) life going from teens years to adulthood, like a Bildungsroman (or a nekketsu in a way), having to experience many somber aspects of life on the way, like the death or sickness of close people, mental illnesses, the feeling of getting lost amidst the complexity of the vast world, the slow understanding of politics, the discovery of other opinions sometimes shattering the previous one, the struggle against inner demons and phobias, the sudden charge of responsibilities and I'm barely getting started; all of this being experienced through lots and lots of shonen-like fightings and the death of many protagonists. While I haven't included extremely gory stuff (I thought about it however), it does include elements that I would argue being much worse and way more disturbing included but not limited to: utter disparition of main protagonists (and I want to emphasize "utter" as in "complete removal of existence", not just death, but that's a story for another time), mass r*ping, marricide and patricide, body experiments and so on. Sure, it does have some wholesome moments, hell even friendship building and love stories, but just like life itself is essentially 95% suffering for 5% wholesome, most wholesome moments in it are usually brutally interrupted. All of this to say that wholesomeness isn't really my forte and to be fair doesn't necessarily have to be in the context of what I want to achieve, I could have made an excuse and say "describing smut in a wholesome way will necessarily lead to way too graphic sex", but it's just an excuse. In fact, I've started to relish wholesome moments being "plot twisted" into degenerate moments. For example, while my next smut is clearly more wholesome (not too hard, the bar was in hell anyway), it's huuuuh definitely not vanilla.
Maybe trying to write exclusively tender moments could help me write the very few kind scenes I want to include... I'll think about it.
In any case, thank you a lot, this really helps. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-16-08 |
You my man. You cooked. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-16-08 |
You asked for Specter sex review so here you go | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-16-08 |
Your warnings for not doing the shark wont stop me | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-16-08 |
So like. If you ever plan to do one of these with skadi. Would the final review just be all 3 together, with the doctor | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-16-08 |
Good bye soldier, it was nice knowing you | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-16-08 |
No, since if I ever decide to do the skadi one (might be next week? Might be not? *cue Jojo outro theme*), then I would HAVE to write a fourth, longer one describing a foursome. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-16-08 |
But It’d be worth it. Trust. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-16-08 |
Okay fam, got some points I HAVE to bounce off of.
First: Stop flagellating yourself over my critique. You're still cooking some good ass things.
>Completely deliberate, a famous French movie youtuber once said that horror should be visceral, not instantaneous. The goal was to set a gory settings prior to this point to make the battle way more intense and a way to feel the stakes. That's usually how good horror movies go : an uncanny setting, a trigger to make the horror feel more "alive", then the fighting on this setting. If it worked for you, then good, that was entirely the point.
That's what took me for a loop. If I have to experience horror, I prefer the VERY slow burn, with sudden accelerations at key points, but without jumpscares. Perfect horror for me is the radio mechanic in Silent Hill games. But you went for the other type and dude, there's a reason I STILL was hooked on this shit. :3
Also, lemme guess: either Karim Debacche's review of Paranormal Activity, or Fossoyeur de Films's review of La Pora (Frayeur)... God, I miss these two. While I will always respect Karim for chasing his dream, I'm still salty he's now exclusively working on JdG.
... No, I am not french :3 shit is that good. Fossoyeur's review of Battle Royale 2 and Karim's review of Signs changed my brain chemistry forever.
>the complete story I'm trying to write is... Clearly not wholesome... Sure, it does have some wholesome moments, hell even friendship building and love stories, but just like life itself is essentially 95% suffering for 5% wholesome, most wholesome moments in it are usually brutally interrupted.
In that case, I have SO MANY THINGS I want to recommend you watch or read because I genuinely think you'll love em. Want the list, or you'd rather never be influenced?
>For example, while my next smut is clearly more wholesome (not too hard, the bar was in hell anyway), it's huuuuh definitely not vanilla.
Honestly, based on this, I REALLY hope my recent fuckup here will not stop me from posting. Because my next review (possibly two if I'm allowed) will feature villains. They will not be truly horror, but I'd like them to be slightly... Off.
So if you can spare me a moment, roast me on them next week. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-16-08 |
>Also, lemme guess: either Karim Debacche's review of Paranormal Activity, or Fossoyeur de Films's review of La Pora (Frayeur)
It is indeed Karim Debbache, but I believe it was on his review of House of the Dead (EDIT : actually it's his Stay Alive one, just rewatched it, at around 10:10.) and the fact that you know who he is is slightly scary.
> Want the list, or you'd rather never be influenced?
While I'm interested, keep in mind the story is actually finished, just unwritten so it's probably not gonna influence much.
>I REALLY hope my recent fuckup here will not stop me from posting.
Just saw the utage review got removed, what happened? | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-16-08 |
>It is indeed Karim Debbache, but I believe it was on his review of House of the Dead and the fact that you know who he is is slightly scary.
No need to be. I'm on the other side of the mediterranean, and JdG was big AF for the OG geek community. And when you watched him, you got recommended a lot of shit. Never clicked with Cyprien for example, but Pause manga, Fossoyeur de Films or Crossed? GIMME MORE. MORE!!!
>While I'm interested, keep in mind the story is actually finished, just unwritten so it's probably not gonna influence much.
So.
Gaming: Super Paper Mario, Silent Hill 2, and... Actually, look up Marsh's review of Gu-L instead of playing the game. Faster and better than trying to run the real deal.
Theater: A Doll's house, by Ibsen. If they didn't change it, hunt down the translated "J'ai Lu" old print (the one with the red circle logo). One of the greats of Theater in my country keeps saying it's one of the most faithful translations he experienced in the medium. (This is a guy that tried learning ANCIENT GREEK to experience stuff like Medea in its original form. So it's not small praise)
Movies: Jacob's Ladder (yes I know our shared source loves the movie it's that good), Cronenberg, and David Lynch.
Music: Adagio, and more specifically, their Album "Dominate.".
Literatture: Unironically, Coraline by Neil Gaiman.
For an very OUT THERE recommendation, ask someone that read these books to lend you Twilight Breaking Dawn with a Bookmark on the moment Bella starts giving birth, read the entire scene, then close that shite and return it. I swear David Lynch posessed Stephanie Mayer for just that scene and left.
And... There's a book I read before that is even more brutal and painful to me than what you cooked, but with NONE of the substance or subtlety. It's my most hated fiction book of all times.
Pig Island. By Mo Hayder. I genuinely feel it's THE example on what someone like you should not do in order to write peak, although it falls down at the last 50 pages or so.
>Just saw the utage review got removed, what happened?
Out of respect to the mods, I'll take this to PMs. But know that their hand was forced and they were 100% in the right for taking it out. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-16-08 |
It's okay, just enjoy the reading | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-17-08 |
Alright I've started writing it, lovey dovey it will be. | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-18-08 |
VANILLA ENJOYERS!! SCREAM!!!!!
"Thaaaank yoouu!"
(We can't be agressive, sorry....) | r/0sanitymemes | comment | r/0sanitymemes | 2024-18-08 |
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