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Patience is when your waiting .I was patience when in line waiting for lunch .I didnt c ut any one to eat .I was standing and waiting for my turn .Patience ,some people dont have it .Lots of people just cut or yell at you because they dont have any patience. Sometimes people will push you out of their way .They only do that because they dont have patience at all. Patience is what people need .People need patience because lots o f feelings get hurt .Everyone should have patience.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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I am not a patience person, like I cant sit in a sit for more than five minutes, but there was one time I was patience and i bet very alse was to that right riding a bike where out training wheels. When I was five learned how to ride a bike I just keeped falling of at one piont my bike flip and I allmost broke my jaw but i didnt. Finally after @NUM1 weeks of onstint falling I rode for @NUM2 minutes without falling and finally learn how to riken a bike.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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One day I was at basketball practice and I was running has with my team when I was getting really really thirsty do after we did are suicides (a running exercise)I asked coach if we could go get some drinks coach said after are double drible down and back exercise @CAPS1 I did the exercise and we all rushed to the drinking fountain and I was at the end of an @NUM1 girl line .I waited and waited until finally there I was faced with that drinking fountain when one girl says can I have a drink thank you and all I could do if be stunned..Thats were I heard a bright ladys lets go! I was @CAPS1 mad but I quickly took a @NUM2 second drink of water and rushed over to coach and now Im the fisst one alot and I take long drunks do my teammates call me a fish!
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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I going to write about a time when I went to the @ORGANIZATION1 fair, we had fun, we saw a ride we wanted to get on, so we got in line. Suddenly, we noticed that we were at the end of the line. So my mother said. @CAPS1 get on another ride then. We already tried the other rides, my father said. So we stayed at the end of the line until it was our turn, and said that was the last ride, soon there were people behind us complaining, their younger children was getting mad, and parents was hollering. We just stood there, and kept being patient. That didnt desterb us. since we were raised to be patient, and wait our turn at things. I feel being patient is very important, because if you act up in line, you might make people think theyre holding you up, but its the line moving slow. Advice: when you are waiting at the end of the line, dont shout, scream, holler, or yell at anyone, it only creates trouble. Just dont think about all of the people ahead of you, talk to someone, just take your mind off of it for a while, then youll notice, the line is moving quicker than you expected. P.S. We enjoyed the ride.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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It can be very hard for somebody to be patient. If you are patient, then you are understanding and tolerant. You have to be patient sometimes. When you go to the dentist or doctors office, you need to be very patient. There was a girl who had to go to the dentist. She hated the dentist. It was always so boring. First, youd sit there while your parents did a whole bunch of paperwork. You have to just sit there for like @NUM1 minutes before you even go in. Then, when you finally go in, they start working on your teeth for like ten minutes, then youd sit there for another fifteen minutes. Finally, When you are done getting your teeth cleaned youd sit there for another ten minutes while your parents talk to the dentist. So, you need to be patient sometimes, even when you are just dying of boredome.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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There was a girl name @PERSON1. She loved spending time with her mom. Every weekend they would either @CAPS3 the movies, amusement or water park, or just stay home. This time was different though. @PERSON1 was even a little scared about @CAPS1 was about @CAPS3 happen. Today was a @DATE1 and @PERSON1 and her mom was watching videos of her mom when she was young. After the video, @PERSON1 and her mom looked at each other and laughed. Once they settled down, @PERSON1s mom looked sad. @CAPS1s wrong mom? @PERSON1 asked. I have @CAPS3 go. I have @CAPS3 go somewhere for work and cant take you with me, mom replied. @CAPS2 not? asked @PERSON1. I dont know, but I need you @CAPS3 wait here with your father. Ill be back soon, the mom said calmly. With that @PERSON1s mom left and drove away. @PERSON1 stood there confused and wishing her mom didnt have @CAPS3 go. Then she went @CAPS3 the phone and called her dad. An hour later, @PERSON1s dad came @CAPS3 her house. He calmed @PERSON1 down, who had been crying because she missed her mom. @PERSON1 went @CAPS3 her room and began @CAPS3 wait patiently for her mom. Weeks past and @PERSON1s mom still hasnt returned. Every night now @PERSON1 cried hoping her mom would come. During the day she would wait watching for her mom. @PERSON1 wanted her mom more than ever now. Though see never complained @CAPS3 her father and understands that her mom left for an important reason, but still she missed her mom. Two years have passed since @PERSON1s mom had left. @PERSON1 didnt cry as much but still waited. Waited for her mother @CAPS3 come back. One day @PERSON1 heard a knock on the door, she answered it and there stood her mother. They stood on the porch for a moment, then hugged each other. They both cried and her mom whispered Im sorry. @CAPS3 @PERSON1. Now @PERSON1 and her were unseperatable. They never left each others side again.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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Un Patience @CAPS1. My name is @CAPS2 and I have a very hipper non patience horse named @CAPS1. @CAPS1 is a chestnut quarter horse with a white star on his forehead who is very un patient. He is always hipper and ready to go. For example when we are getting ready to go on a horse ride in our back trains he dose not stand still when I am tacking him up at the post. And when we are on the ride he always is so far up ahead that I have to stop him to wait for the group. And thats when he gets unpatient. No matter what he will not stand still and wait for the group so I have to spin him around and walk back to the group. Meany times I have tried training him to be patient but I have always failed. I guess he just always has to be doing something. But I will always love him no matter how un patience he is.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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A time when I was patient was when I preordered a videogame called @CAPS1 @CAPS2 I preordered it a month before it came out and I couldnt wait for it to come out. I mostly wanted it because @ORGANIZATION1 is the company that makes it and this is the last game @ORGANIZATION1 was making because some other company bought the @CAPS1 series from @ORGANIZATION1. When the game finally came out on @DATE1 fourteenth two thousand ten, I bought with my friends and the game is amazing. I would give it four of five stars. Im not absessed with it through. I play it only about two hours a day which is all my parensts let me play any way. Hala @CAPS2 is my very favorite game.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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One time I was patience it was when I wanted a phone I didnt get a phone I knew I was gonna get one someday .The day finally came to get my phone @DATE1 it was my @NUM1 birthday .I was opening presents and I didnt know what I was getting but the last and find big present was a cell phone .So I called my friend on it and she said whose phone are you calling from I said my .I couldnt believe I could be so patience for such a long time .I was so happy that I could be so patience for so long. I did not know someone could be so patience for so long .Once I got my phone I wasnt patience for waiting for a texted message to come back to me .After all I got patience and just waited until I got the text message back . I wish I could be patience everyday but cant do that .Im happy that I have a phone so I can call my mom after all my activitys and then I know she is on her way and I will be patience with her: could I ever be more patience . Some days I never patience with anything .one day I will teach someone to be patience to me and I will be happy to do that .But some day and every day after that I will be to patience for everybody .I wish everybody will be patience some day, Patience means you will just wait for that day or moment of live .This a time when I was patience and when I want other people to be patience .I hope someday everybody in the world will be patience with everybody. Will you please help other people to be patient and then they could teach someone new every day .I will be patience or trie to be patience and wait for another thing to happen in life .I hope you are patience at times too. Thanks for reading the time I was patience and times when I want to be patience .Hope you enjoyed his story.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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I think patience is a time when you have to be calm. It is also a time of wateing. For some people being patient is extremely hard. But for me its easy. At times I can be inpatient, but everyone can be. Being patient is kinda new racking, but I manage. A lot of times I get mad if I have to be too patient. I think @PERCENT1 of people in the world dont like to be patient. with patience comes a reward is you are really patient!
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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You know that life is so much harder when you dont have the patients. If you dont then Im going to tell you why. There was a time that found out I was going to @LOCATION1 now thats the good part but when I ask how are we getting there? we had to fly and right then and there I knew I was going to have to be very patient and I thought I didnt have enough patients to fly to @LOCATION1. Although I got through it. Now the worst thing was when I got to @LOCATION1 it was very hot out. We had to stand outside to wait for the bus. It got so hot that I lost all my patients and got so angry at everyone that I thought I was going to blow up! Only because I didnt want to wait for the ride anymore. Haha I came to my sences and I start out it was why easier to wait and the bus eventaly showed up and I already felt way better.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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One nice sunny day I was traped in a doctors office with no air conditioning. this doctors office had @NUM1 chairs in the dirty waiting room. I was already cramed in the room with about @NUM2 people for @NUM3 minutes. I was trying to be patient but the patience was wearing off. Sweat dripped of of my face on to my black @PERSON1 short-@CAPS1 shirt. I was starting to get hot and mad, but I kept my patience. I know if I was going to get mad even more, it wouldnt help or make the time faster. Then all of a sudden, creeeeeck, the door opened. A tall white woman with green schrubs on said, @CAPS2.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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A time I was patient was @DATE1, when I was in line to ride the dragster in @CAPS1 point. I was super hot day, I was at @CAPS1 point with my best friend and we were geting ready to get on the dragster. The line is about an hour long and the sun is beating down on you so to me it felt like forever. Just as we were about to go on the ride they steped us because the ride wasent working right. So we had to wait another @NUM1 mins. Luckly my best firend and I had good patients unlike some of the other people who stormed out of there in the first five minutes. We waited and got on the ride and it was one of the most fun experences of my life. Im so happy we waited said @PERSON1 my best firend. Some people have patient like @PERSON1 and I, and some dont like the the people who ran of there. Im glade we waited or that would not have happened. In this case patient was a great thing for @PERSON1 and I.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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One day, my soccer team was in the chamionchip game in we facing the lions. At the start of the game I was on the bench I was the worst on my team. After the @DATE1 we were up @NUM1 but my coach still put me on the bench and I just sat there and cheered for my. The next to quarters went by and it was tie game @NUM2. Half way through the @DATE2 are star player got hurt so coach put me in. I had no due what do I was just chassing the ball. With one minute left I was standing by their goalie and one of my team mates shot the ball zinged through the air and hit me in the foot. The ball redirected into the goal my team started to cheer we were up @NUM3. After the @DATE2 minute was done and horned went off and every one cheered again and lifted me up. Thats how patience helped me.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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This is about a story I was patient I was on an @LOCATION1 @LOCATION1, so this is what happen on the @LOCATION1. I was standing in line on ordered some sausages, eggs, pancakes atia syrup, has browns and orange jucie and take my cool derille sitting a man with a steak for his head and order something and sits down, and I get mad a little the Im still patient okay but then Im really mad because geating steak head gets his before mine and walked in here first. So then I cool down because a nice cute girl walks in orders and comes and sits down where I were sitting then a old think there goding and hip, they and they order sit down. Finally, the girl and I finally get a food and show the old people hip is we challenged them to surf contest but the main in to sit and wait and be patient even through it @NUM1 in the @TIME1.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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Tick, tock, tick, tock. Being patient is hard for some people but easy for others. Im not a very patient person. Ill tell about a time when I was patient. (the only time) One time me my mom and my sister we went to the docter because my sister had a docters appointment. I asked my mom how long it was gonna be and she said about @NUM1 min. @CAPS1 I said ok. @CAPS1 we arrived and she asked if I wanted to come inside and I said no Ill wait in the car. @CAPS1 I was inside of the car waiting and I got boare and turned the music on and this was ??? about @NUM2 or @NUM3 in. About @NUM4 later I got tired of listening to music. @CAPS1 I tried to fall asleep. That didnt work @CAPS1 I went outside to stretch because my arms and legs were tight. It was @NUM5 and my mom and sister come walking. Thats a time I was patient.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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One day @CAPS1 went to school pretty earlie in the @TIME1. He went is just ?? if it were a normal day, and goes to his star class in the @NUM1 grade. He chated with his friends all star and then class was over. Then he goes to @NUM2 hour science and there is a lab with partners. @CAPS3 him and @PERSON2 decide to be partners. Half way through the lab they dont know what to do. @CAPS3 @CAPS1 goes up to the teacher and interupts her and another student. @CAPS3 the teacher says ill be with you in a moment, but he continues to bug her. @CAPS3 he got a step. Then later that day he was in @CAPS2 and was working on a work sheet but the teacher was writing with the principal. @CAPS3 he decided to wait for her to be done @CAPS3 he wouldnt get in trouble, but it was taking much longer than expected @CAPS3 he noved th next problems. then the teach comes back and he got her help. @CAPS3 in conclusion @PERSON1 learned two lesson that day. One that you can get in trouble for being impatient and get a step. Two that if you are pollite and courtaeous in class and be patiet you can get the reward of getting a letter citizenship grade. Wich @PERSON1 did that day.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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I recall once a famous madican named @PERSON1 was prefering a stunt that took enourmous amounts of pateints and courage it was named @CAPS1 In Time. The madichian had to stay in a block of ice for @NUM1 days or @NUM2 hours! The great madichian had only a sweater. He had the consiled ice open to public as the magnificent madichian said I could bearly hear anything. He waited hours on and like falling down on abyiss or bottomless pit. Until the final seconds ended. The madichian as finally free. And alive
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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One day, a few years ago, I woke up and my mom said we were going to my grandmas house. So started to get ready. After I was done getting dressed I looked on. My dresser and grabbed my @MONEY2 @MONEY3 that I was saving up to buy something just incase we went to the store When we got there I saw my cousins dad @CAPS1 walking a puppy. I walked up to him and asked about the dog, he said it was his brothers dog and he was selling it. My mom said I could get a dog so I asked him how much did he coast. @CAPS1 said @MONEY1. I got really excited because I had @MONEY2 and could get @MONEY3 from my granding. So I called my mom but she was busy somewhere else but she told me that she wanted to see the dog before I buy him. So @CAPS1 waited their for hours but my mom took forever. Then finally I got impatience and bought him. But my wow wasnt mad because she ended up liking him
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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The time that I was patient was not long ago. It was a day of boredom and waiting. I went to a candy store to buy some candy, I wanted a lorry pop. The man told me to hold on when he was getting my candy. It was @NUM1 minutes until he brought me my candy. I was patient enough to wait for my candy. There was another day like that. It was at the cernical, I was at the end of the line waiting to get on a ride. There was a man who was arguing at the life gaurd instructer for not letting him on the ride. He was arguing for an half an hour. S was patient waiting for him to stop. I did not complane or argue about the man who was wasting our time.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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One day I was patient was when I tried out for volleyball. I had to be patient because the two coaches had to pick who was going to be on a team and if so which team. My friends and I waited patiently in the gum as the coaches told kids privately in the hallway. They had to do it privately because there are two teams the A team and the @CAPS1 team. Finally there was about @NUM1 other girls still waiting I chose to go last because I thought I could handle the challenge of patience but I was wrong. The thrill of finding out was @CAPS2! At last it was my turn I walked out into the hall and found out I was on the @CAPS1 team. Although it wasnt the A team I was still happy I didnt get out. That was a day I had to be very patient.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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A time that I was patient was last year at cheer competition. In the beginning of the day I was patient getting in line to get ready to perform. Once we were ready we were waiting to go to perform. After, we perfomed we went to watch the rest of the teams. The other teams were really good. Then are team went and had lunch while some of the teams were still performing. We had to wait til all the teams were done. Once the teams were done they called all the squads to the mat it was award time. All the teams sat down on the mat. My team members were waiting patiently to see if we worn in cheer or in dance. We waited
and waited
and waited till finally he called are name. The junior varsity cheer leader! We took first in dance and fourth in cheer. That day was a good day for me and I was very patient and being patient can turn out right or not the way you wanted it to be. You never now till it happens. That is a time when I was patient at cheer competition.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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Im writing about the time I was patient at a @ORGANIZATION1 game. It was my birthday and my dad took me, to go to watch the @LOCATION1 vs. the @LOCATION2 huggets in @LOCATION1. We were in a huge traffic jam. The jam was caused by a wreck a couple miles ahead and everyone was trying to get to the game before it started. I was patient with the whole trip because the trip was about a @NUM1 ½ hours long. My dad, uncle, aunt and me were all kind of frustrated that it was taking so long, but I kept my cool and was able to make it through the @NUM1 ½ hour drive. When we got to the arena the @LOCATION1 and @CAPS1 were warming up and the game was about to begin. At the end of the day the @LOCATION1 ended up winning. That was the most best birthday ive ever had. Now I dont think I could ever keep my cool like that again because I have a very short fuse now that in order. I will never forget that birthday again.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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Being patient? Being patient is very hard for me because I am bipolar and I have savere anger issues. My experience with being patient is when I lived with my foster family!!! They had grandkids that really annoyed me!!! My foster family had a different religion than me I am atheist. They are @CAPS1 and they would constantly tell me I am wrong!!! It made me very upset but I didnt say nothing because I was being patient. And I hate it. With my anger problems im very surprised I didnt go off on them? But yes patience does take practice lots and lots of practice. Because not everyone in this world is patient!!! Tolerance twords children
I dont like kids to much but where I wed to live there were tons of little kids that were the grand kids of my foster family and I sued those kids are annoying but I had to tolerate them. Kids are very hard to tolerate and so are guardian parents they are the worst they tell you what to do and they aint even youre parents but I tolerated it.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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One when I was patient was when we were going of north. We had to pack but I was already done because I had packed the work before my family was packing still & I went to sit in the car because I was already ready I had nothing else to do when I went back inside the house they were almost done packing so I went to the bathroom when I got out they were finished packing. When we got going I had to wait for over @NUM1 hours to get where we were going but when we got there we had fun. The reason I used this as my example is because it took a lot of patience to get to mackinoc city from nbly. That day I learned a lot on how it is important to be patient.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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Patients is verey important. But I m not verey good with my patients. And when I am and I wait my turn I end up forgetting what I going to say. I guess I m not verey patient because my family is not verey patient. My family is not verey patient because we just want to say what were gona say before we forget it. Are family it also verey forgetful. That is probably another reason why we arnt patient. Patients is im portant because it helps you be more calm and it helps you wait turn. Thats all I know about patients.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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Patience is when you can take your time at something. When your able to wait, not in a hurry pushing shuvinig an rushing like some thing bad happen. Being patient also means that you are understanding when it come to tolerents and it when you are calm, cool, peace an love!!!
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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When I was patient. Was when I go down the river with my dad and my two sisters (@CAPS1 @MONEY1).The only way I'm patient is when my dad says we are going from north to @LOCATION1. So I have no chose to be patient because it is a two houre trip. But there is a train track brige that my dad least use @CAPS2 off of and tack a brake and eat some lunch and the brige is about one houre ride down the river if you realy all the way but whe just me and my dad go we just slot the hole way.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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Patience? I am not a patient type of person. I am a @PERSON1 @CAPS1. He played in a @CAPS11 called @CAPS2 which l really wanted to @CAPS10. Which came out @DATE1. That l havent even seen yet until One day l was sitting in my porch where l asked my mom to @CAPS19 to @CAPS9 and @CAPS10 @CAPS2 that @DATE2 when she said "wlc" l was really upset because l wanted to @CAPS10 it really really bad. I was being very patient at the time. I had called my @CAPS4's, @CAPS5's, sister's and brother's to fave me. @CAPS14 they said they were busy so l cried myself to sleep. The next @NUM1 days my mom and dad was talking about going to the movies and out to dinner. I walked in screaming and yelling "@CAPS6 ARE @CAPS7 @CAPS8 @CAPS9 AND @CAPS10 A @CAPS11 AND @CAPS12 @CAPS13 @CAPS14 @CAPS7 @CAPS16'@CAPS17 @CAPS9 @CAPS19 @CAPS7 OWN @CAPS21" @CAPS22 I left out the room. The very next day my brother and his girlfriend went to @CAPS9 @CAPS10 it knowing l wanted to @CAPS9. They came home reasing me saying @CAPS6 good the @CAPS11 was. So that night l went down stairs to demand to @CAPS9 @CAPS10 "@CAPS2" saying " I am being very patient with you all about taking me to @CAPS10 @CAPS2 @CAPS14 you all are pushing my buttons so l demand to @CAPS9 tomarrow" @CAPS22 I waited @NUM2 second @CAPS22 she said that l could @CAPS9 this @DATE2. That was the very @NUM3 time that l was patient, and I'm proud of myself, I @CAPS16'@CAPS17 wait to @CAPS10 my @CAPS25 @PERSON1 @CAPS26"
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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I am not a patient person at all. But sometimes I have to be like my birthday for instance, I would love it if my birthday came at least every month. But of course, I only have @NUM1 birthday a year, so I have to wait. I would like to be a patient person. Its just not in the cards for me. My father on the other hand is more patient than anyone. I know he will tell me to clean the car @DATE1 I told him I didnt do it yet so he says he will give me more time. I couldnt be that patient with my kids. I would tell them to clean it now or they would be grounded. I wouldnt force them to or anything but Im not gonna wait a whole month before I get my car cleaned! I guess I could try to be as patient with my father but that would be really hard. Although if Im patient, Im sure I will be able to do it!
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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Patience is when you are waiting for something to happen and you experience difficulties but you do not complain. My friend @PERSON2 is a patient person. Her and her brother are both very patient. Their dad has been gone for most of their lives fighting for our country. This is the story of the time @PERSON2 and her brother @PERSON1 were patient. When @PERSON1 was born his dad was @NUM1 years old. @PERSON1 dad had already applied fro the army. His dad has been their most of his life. Two years later @CAPS1 sister, my best friend was born. Their dad was with them til @CAPS2 exie was about @NUM2 I believe, but he left that year. @PERSON1 new why his dad was gone, but @PERSON2 is about a year behind because she has really bad A.D.H.D. so doesnt know why she didnt see or talk to her dad for about three years. When she turned about six years old she knew her dad was gone and that was the time @PERSON1 became to be in the in the army and also it was the time their dad was in the leg by a machete. When their came back for about a year, they spent a lot of time with him, and @PERSON2 is very fragile and he would try play with her and tickle her and it hurt @PERSON2 and she would scream @CAPS3! @CAPS3! but it didnt work he would just keep going and acting like he didnt hear her. @PERSON1 isnt fragile at all, he loves his dad and so does she but she doesnt like him as a person. She likes my dad more than hers because she sees him more and she thinks hes nicer. In conclusion I think @PERSON2 and @PERSON1 are very patient because they dont know if theyll ever see him again after he gets on that plane, and Ive asked their mom and she says they never complain about missing their dad.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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Patience is an important thing. Patience is when you are understanding and tolerant. I have been patient many times. For instance when my mom uses the phone late till she gets of to talk to her. Before events like plays or movies you have to be patient until the movie are play begins. I am most patient during tests. Like this one the mean patience is very important. If you dont have patience to some people that is anrcoying. If i didnt have patience I would be a completely???person people would mind me very amount and every they would @CAPS1 get along with me so inside of bothering someone @CAPS2-stop be patient.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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Long ago in the land of @LOCATION1 their was a young boy named @CAPS1.@CAPS1 wanted to become a ninja like the rest of the older boys but he was to young, he was only six the years old.One day @CAPS1 came running home,he wasnt just running he was fliping, twirling @CAPS1 was acting like fire work, @CAPS1 came bursting threw the door, and said mama mama im @CAPS2 old enough to be a ninga said @CAPS1, and kins mom said well, sorry you cant ninja training isnt till another six yearssaid kins mother, why now when I @CAPS2 turn twelve. @CAPS1 replied well the sensai in still on his training, so youll have to be patient so @CAPS1 waited six long years and @CAPS2 became a ninja
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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One in a land called @CAPS1 bokane there was a young named @PERSON2. In the land of @CAPS2, all the people lived off the land. They believed that everything had a spirit, and when you died the spirit of judging decides what you will be in the next life. To the people of @CAPS2 honor was everythbing, and no person valued @CAPS6 more than the hunter @PERSON2. One day @PERSON2 and his friend @PERSON1 went into the sacred forest to hunt danes, a deer-like animal. As they approached the hunting grounds, both men nocked their bows, and shimied up the trunk of an ancient oak. Both @PERSON2 and @PERSON1 waited for several hours before seeing a dane , and when they did, @PERSON1 had no arrow ready,@CAPS4 of this @PERSON2 got to kill @CAPS6. The dane looked at @PERSON2. @CAPS6 stared at him. Unblinking pupils dialated. Snorting blue mist from its nose. Yet @PERSON2 did not take the shot. Instead the the dane fled into the treeline. @CAPS5 did you not take the shot? whispered @PERSON1. @CAPS6 was to far away my friend. I was not sure one arrow would kill @CAPS6 wiithout pain. @PERSON2 replied simply.The next day the pain returned to the woods and again a dane appeared. This time though @PERSON1 had an arrow ready,but @PERSON2 had rites to this dane as @CAPS6 was the same one from the day before. The danes rear was toward the pair, and again @CAPS6 was stai ring at @PERSON2. @PERSON2 simply steped back. Soon @PERSON1 took the shot since @PERSON2 would not. The arrow flew high and impaled the obsidian tip into an ash tree. @CAPS5 did you not take the shot? whispered @PERSON1. @CAPS6 is not honorable to take the life of a beast with @CAPS6s back turned. @PERSON2 whispered back. On the third day the same dane stalked through the hunting grove of @PERSON2 and @LOCATION1. The dane walks through the grove from the left this time giving @PERSON2 a clear shot at its right flank.This shot @PERSON2 takes. The arrow flies tree and pierces the animals lungs and heart. @CAPS9 the spirit judge @CAPS10 will be pleased. @PERSON2 states as he corries his kill from the woods. In the end , patience rewards better than impatience. No matter the circumstances.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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One time when I was patient was when me and my family, went on a fishing trip to @LOCATION1, @CAPS1. Once we got on the boat it took @NUM1 minutes to go through the river. Then at @NUM2 we just waited, trolling through the water. Rocking side to side like a baby in its crib. Setting up all the poles and tures. Then around @NUM3 we got our first hit. My dad rushed over to get the pole and started reaching as fast as he could. Eventually he got it in it was a, @ORGANIZATION1 at @MONEY1. Then around @NUM4, another pole got a hit I rushed over grabbed the pole and started realing it in. With some help my fish turned out to be a king @ORGANIZATION1 that came in at @NUM5. and @NUM6 inches tall. That is why it always helps to be patient. You never know whats going to happen if you are patient.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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A long time ago me and my family were going to a cottage we owned. It was about a four hour drive. It is the funniest place to go to. I was so happy I couldnt wait until we got there. I new I had to be patient. But I wanted to get there so bad. But if I would complain a lot I knew I would get in trouble. I know that because I had to learn the way. About a couple weeks before that we had to visit my grandma, she lived about two hours away. I kept complaining that it was taking to long. Then when we got home later on that hight I got my phone taken away for a week, so after that I knew not to complain ever again about something taking to long. So on our way to my grandmas cottage I didnt complain. Not complaining is smart to do. If you are unpatient dont go on long trips. Its good to be patient since I was patient the whole ride to my grandmas my mom was happy with me. If you are patient people will know that you are a very tolerant person.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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One time I went in the @CAPS1 and I had to sit in the visiting room/ area for about @NUM1 min- @NUM2 mins. I really didnt care, because I had to go to school after I was done you could tell any me in was not very happy because your only sapose to be waiting for @NUM3 minutes. I finally got in and went to sit in the chair and they took my rubber bands off and I had to sit there and wait for about @NUM4 minutes. I was still being patient, because I didnt want to go to school. I dont like coming in the middle of class, because everybody stares at you. The doctor finaly came to check on me then I got different color rubber bands on. Also the doctor came to see me and see if my bracese were all right. I finaly got out of the @CAPS1 oficce and it was about @NUM5 so I got to go home and I was happy.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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17,875
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Their was a time when I was patient when I went to the barber shop and my family and I was going on a trip and I had to get my haircut the day before we left. I went to the barber shop was packed so the guy that cut my hair told me I was next in the chair. So then more and more people started coming in and he let those people jump in front of me so I just sat there and waitted. After those people were done he never call me up so he got on his phone and went outside. Then he told me wait until he came out the restroom then five more people came in so thats when my mom called my phone and asked me was I done because I been up their from @NUM1 to @NUM2 and she said go to some one else chair because was was about to go somewhere. I still needed to pick my stuff will be leaving at @NUM3 a.m the next morning.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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One @DATE1 week a couple of years ago my grandparents were over. We went to my @ORGANIZATION1s sisters house and my @ORGANIZATION1 and aunt (my @ORGANIZATION1s sister) were going to teach me hoe to tie my shoes because I was going into kindergarten and the teacher wouldnt do it for you. They said if I learned to tie my shoes I would get to pick something out at the dollar store so that got me all excited! When we got their after I had lunch they began teaching me. The tirck they taught me went like this: after you have the first crossover step you make the bop(tree) and you put the other string around it (the bunny loving around the tree. @CAPS1 you put it through (the bunny darling in its hole.) @CAPS1 youre bond. After many tries was starting to get the hang of it. Later we went back to my house and my @ORGANIZATION1 kept helping me. Finally one afternoon I got it, my @ORGANIZATION1 was happy and she kept telling me good job. Later we went to the store and picked something out! My @ORGANIZATION1 had to be patient with me. She wasnt getting all mad when I kept messing up she just kept being encouraging and patient. My @ORGANIZATION1 was patient and it helped me learn faster.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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Patience. Being patient means that you needs to make and dor one' thing constantly to make one????understand. That is patience. My mom is patient. When I dart understand a problem, she will explain @CAPS1 to me, never in rush. She don't yell a t me when I don't understand, unlike my dad, who is very impatient. He would yell, and possiblely cursed at me in chinease. That happens nearly every time I don't understand something. But my mom will contune explain to me until I understand what @CAPS1 means. Some people @MONTH1 be impatient because of triats or because that he or she has high blood pressure. Patience is something my people have, but @CAPS1 seems like even move people lacks @CAPS1.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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I am patient every year @CAPS1 one specil day to come. My birthday ??? ??? @NUM1 was a specil day @CAPS1 my mom and dad, @NUM2 boy my mom ever had @NUM3 boy my dad had. I am still wating @CAPS1 my brithday to come again.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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Swimming is a lot of fun. I enjoy feeling the cool water all around me. Patience is an important part of the swimming you have to be patient when waiting to start practice, stretching, waiting for instruction when learning a new stroke learning a new way to turn at the wall, ect. On the first day of swim team this year the coaches went through safety rules, regulations, and what we were going to do this year. For all the people who knew this stuff already, like me it wasn't very easy to be patient. But I personally think the entire team did a good job listening. Patience is important.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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Patience what is it really? Do any of us have it? I think if we think about it we could all be patient. One time when I was in @LOCATION1 we went to @ORGANIZATION1 and we rod no wait for any of the rides. The next time we went there we had to be patient because the lines were really long. I could wait but it seemed like a lot of the little kids had a hard time standing still. Another example about patences is when the miners got stated in the mine in @LOCATION2 for @NUM1 days they had to be patient and wait for someone to rescue them. They also had to be patient when the were coming up from the mine in that little elevator thingy magig. One last example on patence is when you are walking in a group with other people you have to be patient and listen to there ideas and let them do some of the work. These I think are just some examples of why you have to be patient or when you have to be patient.
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1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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d time I was patient was when we where going to disocy w orkerd for the first time and l was very excited ! We only bad one week left to wait to go .But I couldnt wait that long l thought l waited long enough to, and I wanted to go at moment. Even thought I had to wait still bad a fon time a disrey word I juss had to be patient!
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0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
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0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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I will be writing about patience in my own mix up way even thow you are adults. Once their was a littel silck warm getting ready to change in to a butter fly month. But this silck worm had a problem he was still to skiny to change he had to be nice & fat like a fat pratle stick cut in half. He crold going bush to bush eating any green leave he could find. But heres where a nether problem kicked in to please. It was becoming winter cut side, so every leave he found was brown & nasty. In the grass was changing to. But he wanted to change in to a moath so bad that he had chose but to eat the die leave & grass. In he was very patient about it to. But then he got trained at eating die leaves & grass so he grow more & more unpatient because he wanted to change so bad that he explaed
. But he wack up in seen that he was in a white silck wrapping so he repped out of it. In seen he was a moath after all but then he remeinder he was eating nice green leave together. In wrapped his ??? up in want to sleep. And thats how he had that strange dream.
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1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
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0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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I have lived in a lot of different. Places through out my life. They are @ORGANIZATION1, @PERSON1, @CAPS1, @LOCATION2, @LOCATION1 and @CAPS2. That's @CAPS3 different place. @CAPS6 was and still is land to about to @CAPS6 @CAPS4 somewhere along that long road in @LOCATION2 my parents got devased. My dad moved to @CAPS5 and eventually @PERSON2. We moved to @LOCATION1 with my mom (my sister and me). @CAPS6 was fun there because @CAPS6 hadn't seen my cousin, my aunt, my uncle, and my grandma for about six years. @CAPS4 I hadn't seen my dad in almost @NUM1 months. My grandma says to not to moving and till see him soon. By soon @CAPS6 didn't think like meant @NUM2 months. In those @NUM2 months we wanted a house neat to a patch of works and a fresh water @DATE1. My mom even got a boyfriend that she later broke up with. Then later she started and still is dating the guy we are renting awe house from. When my dad called and said that he was coming, @CAPS6 made me. So happy. @CAPS6 @CAPS7 didn't that @CAPS6 could make @CAPS6 @NUM4 months without seeing my dad. @CAPS4 @CAPS6 did @CAPS6. Now that he's settled in a see him once a match for one weekend. With better than @NUM4 months or not at all.
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0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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I was patient on the trip to @LOCATION1 it took two days to get down there I got hungery and had to go to the bathroom when ever I was hungery I had to what until next stop when we got gas so when it was on full I had to be patient with out complaining. So, I had to be patient until the gas tank was empty thats when we got gas and I could eat something or I had to be patient until there was a @CAPS1 on the right hand or a test area because the have a vending machine there and bathrooms there too. On the right hand side because we can get off on get back on the high way. Thats when I had to be patient.
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1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
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0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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When I was patient. I was patient once or twice. One time was when I had to use the phone but my mom was on it. So I waited an hour and a half to use the phone. Another time was when I wanted to go to @ORGANIZATION1 to get some pop. So I was patient while my mom got everybody ready to go to @ORGANIZATION1.
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0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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It was my first camping trip! Well, we went camping when I was one but I dont remenber a lot. I was super excited! So, Im sorry if I couldnt help but wonder @CAPS1 the ? are we going! My patience was not very good. While I was waiting for my dad to hook the camper up to his truck I sat there very bored. I kept saying when are you going to be done? Or,when are we leaving? Everytime I got, just be patient hunny. So, I tried it wasnt really working.We finally left, it was an hour drive and when your seven thats a very long time. I had nothing to do, I was bored out of my mind! So, I said daddy when are we gonna be there? I got later, just be patient. So I followed demands and went along with his idea. Once we got there the first thing I wanted to do was swim. So as my mom was getting her swimsut on. I was so impatient I looked like I had ants in my pots. I was going to go knock of the bathroom door but, I didnt I took what I had learnt earier and did it. I sat down and patiently waited for my mom. So throughout this I learned a big lesson on patience. If you are patient things will happen much faster. I still use this lesson today. But every one in a while everyone is a little impatient.
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1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
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0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
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A time of when I was patient was when me & my siblings were waiting to see if they were going to alow us to get our first puppy. We waited & waited for about an hour while my parent were discussing if we should or shouldnt. When finally they called us down to the basement. At first they said no & we were devastated. My mom really wanted the puppy but it was my dads decision. My sister then made a face my dad couldnt resist. So he then said yes. I then had to be patient. We were going out of town in two days so we couldnt get him the next day. The next day came & my dad was at work. So my mom decided to surprise my dad by bring the puppy home today (@CAPS1). We went & got him from the store (shaggy @CAPS2) because my aunt who lived in a different state gave us permission that we could bring @CAPS1 down with us to her house. He was surprised and over joyed to see us playing with @CAPS1 outside. we all fell love with @CAPS1 & he is all of ours new snuggle buddy!
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0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
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0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
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You have to be paceint when you are cooking some cookies. It takes a long time to cook cookies. You have to be pacient when you are waiting to play a game. And you have to be pacint in the watting room until they call your name. You have to be pacint when you get out in a game you have to be pacint to get @CAPS1 in. When you get a home run you have to be pacint when they try to get the ball. For exaple the game of the sorry you have to be pacint to get the card @NUM1, @NUM2 if you get a one then you can get out of the house. if you get a to then you get out and get anouther turn.
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2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
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0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
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My sister is very patient unlik my brothers and me. Well my sibling and me had are proggress reports coming and I was so excited to see what I got, and my brothers were anxious and we work always both a mom saying when are they coming did you them. But my sister was always calm and patient. Then the day they arrived we then got nervous except @PERSON1. The reason why she is patient is because she trys to keep off her mind by sleeping or reading. But back to report cards we opened them and then everyone was happy even @CAPS1 because we got good grades. Then after that my brothers and me learned from my sister and now we all have patience.
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1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
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0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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It had been about one??? after I got my ipod touch and I really wanted to get this certain??? no it was a movie. The movie was I @CAPS1 @CAPS2. I had already seen it once from my cousins ipod but it was so cool, I had to watch it again. It had so much action in it. And zombies??? attack. Multiple words @CAPS3
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1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
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3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
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0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
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2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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I know I can I said to myself as I was getting ready to do a back walkover for the first time by myself. I bent backwards tried kicking over and feel! Errg! I stood back up and asked @PERSON1 my coach, @CAPS1 my shoulders right? @CAPS2 @CAPS1 your shoulder the kick over. @CAPS3 got it I said. As I bent backwards again I slowly raised my left leg to kick over, then I pushed my shoulders forward and I did it! I finally did it by myself! Later that night I showed my mom I could do it. So I did the same exact thing I did at practice. I did it again! But this time at home. The look on my mom face could never be replaced @CAPS4 was so proud of me. Then I @CAPS4 ran over and gave me a high five, then a big bear hug! So I said thank you for being so patient. @CAPS4 said @CAPS5 for you baby.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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@NUM1 years ago on my birthday the only thing I wanted was an I-pad touch. Well everybody got to the party we ate cake and ice cream then I opend presants. I got @NUM2 but none was the @CAPS1 toach. I was sad then I opend birthday cards and I got @MONEY1 I told mom since I didnât get the @CAPS1 I can go buy it. But I had too wait till everybody was gone to go get it. and @NUM3 hours of being patient I finally went and got it.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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A time I was patient is when my little brother kept messing with me. He kept doing dump stuff like pulling the curtins down or playing with the stove. I wanted to hit him. I didnt hit him because he was just being bad.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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I have been patient lots of time at the @ORGANIZATION1. @CAPS3 @CAPS1, @CAPS3 sister, @CAPS3 brother, and @CAPS3 mom and dad we all had to wait on the @ORGANIZATION1 to get all of the shots ready for @CAPS3 brethe, sister, and me. @CAPS4 took forever at about two hours for the @ORGANIZATION1 to get the shots ready to be used end paragraph start @CAPS2. One time me and @CAPS3 dad had to wait an hour to two hours that way I could sign up for football. We had to wait to weigh get the @PERSON3 size helmet and pats, we also had to wait for @CAPS3 pad punts and @CAPS3 mouth gairfi @CAPS3 dad and I one time had to wait a long time in duannms because @CAPS3 mom bought @CAPS3 dad a @NUM1 gun. @CAPS3 dad had to set the gun put in his name end paragraph start @NUM2. For basket ball sign up when I lived in @CAPS3 pleasant @CAPS4 took a long time to sign up for basket ball because we had to get @CAPS3 number put on the @PERSON3 size of shirt for me and @CAPS3 last name I also had to get basket ball shorts @CAPS3 size. When I player soccer for the @PERSON4 soccer team. @CAPS4 took one-hour because there was so many kinds that wanted to play soccer like @CAPS5, @PERSON1, @PERSON2, @CAPS6 and me. When @CAPS3 mom took me to the sign ups year @CAPS4 took almost three hours @CAPS7 to sign up and set pictures taken end paragraph @NUM3. Every school day @CAPS3 friends and I wait like twenty @NUM4 thirty mines @CAPS7 to get a lunch or a kecreoml soriss roles ,zebra cars ,or gaanola bars. @CAPS4 takes alons time before we can @NUM5 out site to play football, soccer, volleyball, and kick ball. The end
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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I was patient when my mom was giving birth to my baby brother. We had to sit in the waiting room. My sister and I for @NUM1 hours I slept @NUM2 times and a lot because my dad was hungry so he got @CAPS1 food also.The first hour I was excited and couldnt wait. The second hour I was coloring with the crayons and paper the nurse brought to @CAPS1.The third hour I watched tv. The fourth hour I slept till about @TIME1 thats what my sister said. My dad came out with plastic looking dress on with the matching head/shower cover and slippers, and he said the next time he comes out my sister and I were gonna be sister to a baby boy . @CAPS1 and sister were so happy. So an hour later my dad came out and said do you want to see @PERSON1 , @CAPS1 and my sister screamed yes When we seen him we were so happy to think he was all ours .
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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If you could ask for one thing, would you ask for patients or motivation? In this situation I would ask for patients. I remember when I was about four or five years old. My two sister and I boreded @CAPS1 to florda. It seemed like we were sitting on the @CAPS1 for hours befor it actually took off. After about ten minutes, I asked if we would be there soon. My sister said no, and that we were only up in the air for about ten minutes. I watched all at the people just sitting there some were on laptops and listening to @CAPS2 players. I looked up at my sister and wondered how she could be so patient. After I asked if we were almost there for the second time, my sister did not answer me. I just sat there doing nothing. I had nothing to entertain myself with. I did not say a word for two hours then I eventually fell asleep. If you could ask for one thing, would you ask for patients or motivation? I am still not very patient, but I am more patient than I was back then.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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@CAPS1! Look out! @CAPS2 squealed. The sound of crunching metal was deaffening. There was no way out. My eyes seemed sealed shut, but they were as wide as could be. T he eery silence frightened me. I felt arms grab me, pulling me to @CAPS9 they concidered safety. In no way, was this to be concidered safety, for this was the beginning of one living-nightmare. The living nightmare of my life. Heres a picture of @CAPS9 I saw: @CAPS3 cars, twisted, tangled and smushed so close together, they seemed as if they were one object. Lying beside me was a small boy. That boy was my brother, @ORGANIZATION1. His chest expands slowly, but as it does, excruciating sounds radiate from him. Blood triddes out from his many cuts. Its unbearable to watch. Ambulences sirens wail as they approach. My father I have yet to see. And thats @CAPS9 scares me most. II still have nightmares of that night. The night everything changed. Not only had I lost my father and brother, but in someways, Id lost my mother as @CAPS6. @CAPS5d never understand the pain of watching your little brother die, all because of something you desired. If I hadnt made my father turn around to get my forgotten notebook, Id still have a @CAPS1 and little @ORGANIZATION1. Ever since the funeral, I could feel my mother and I pulling apart. Nothing with us has been the same since. We fight constently, never listening to @CAPS9 the other has to say. Maybe its just the life of a typical teen and her @CAPS8. I wouldnt know because in no way we we typical. When we arent fighting about who- knows- @CAPS9, we just keep our distance. Sometimes, though, the silence is scarier, more heart pounding, than the shouting. Silence is just so freaking loud! My mother is beginning to attempt the seemingly impossible. @CAPS5 begins to try and understand my strange ways. @CAPS4, @CAPS5 starts, I know I havent been patient with you lately, and for that Im sorry. I will try to be, starting now. I only ask you of one thing. I give her a questioning, gaze, so @CAPS5 continues, I would like you to tell me why you blame yourself? @CAPS5 didnt have to explain any farther. @CAPS6, I made @CAPS1 turn around, my voice caught in my throat, just to get my stupid notebook. A single tear weaved its way down my face. @CAPS7, hunny! my mother teared up as @CAPS6. That doesnt make it your fault! You had no idea it would end that way! I knew my patience had been worn through for a long time, but I refused to snap at my mother now. @CAPS5 was only trying to help. I fought my annoyed tone, which was battling its way out. But I was to win that fight. @CAPS8, I said, regaining composure, thats how I feel about the issue. I wish I could just take your word for it, and maybe overtime I will, but right now, I just need my @CAPS8. @CAPS9 shocked me most was the smile that formed on my mothers lips. I will wait then. And then @CAPS5 hugged me. @CAPS5 hugged me as @CAPS5 had when I was four and broke my leg. Tight and unhesitantly. I could feel the beginning of a new found relationship with my mother. Maybe not as strong as it had been, but definately there. With patience and time, it has bloomed into a healthy relationship, in which we both can enjoy and respect.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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There was one time I was patient when my little brothers play station wasnt working so it took a while to get use to it. It was an @TIME1 and my little brother had jus finished eating and he wanted to play his @CAPS1 but he was having a hard time turning it on but the problem was that some of his games were scratched up. But the next day we bought him a lot of other games that were brand new. So as he tried the games he still couldn`t do it. So than he asked me if I can help him so I helped him but it still didn`t work until I cleared up the play station than we had to wait patiently and than finaly at??? but my little brother and I say work, work, work, work until it went on. Then this day we still say that for the @CAPS1 can work.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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Patience. I was patience when I had to baby sit. I rock him and play with him. I fed him, and walk him. He fell to sleep. My mom still is not home from work. I am going to be late to the movise with my cuzins. I play the game for @CAPS1. I look out the window walk out side and sat on the steps.mom still not there. My cuzins were out side. Ask that to stay a little on gen. now hear came mom .I can go now.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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There are many times when lve been patient but here are just a few. It was a late afternoon my family & I were supposed to go to a big function that day. Like always I didnt know what I was going to wear, about an hour later I found what I was going to wear. I went down stairs to the soon no one was ready & we only had @NUM1 1/@NUM1 an hour left. I was frustrated told everyone to go get ready, but nobody listened to me. But I didnt care so I went up to fore a shower right when was as out to go in my mom come and told me I had to wait ??? She took a shower. Then one by one everyone took a shower except for me. I was loosing my patients. I still waited because I didnt want to start a commotion. Finally I went into take a shower. We were all dressed & ready to go. At the last minutes when we all got in the car, my sister for got her bag & jacket so we had to wait till she got it. We finally made it to the party, not on time but at least we made it. In conclusion, a few exam pies of me showing patients is when I waited to take a or over when in waited for my sister to got her lay a jacket.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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The time I was patient was when I was wait on my mom to have her @CAPS2. The reason why is becaus she was being a pain to me. She was mean and every thing. So I was lik oh my @CAPS1 she need to have this @CAPS2 so all this can be over and done with. This was when she was oly @NUM1 months so I know that I had to be so patient with her antill the @NUM2 months was over.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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One day @CAPS1 ??? baseball ??? , when she signed up ??? speech on ??? trophy baseball correctly, spark ??? and other things. Her friend @CAPS2 walked out of the room because he didnt have patience, so when he came into the room again the sign-up already went around, so after the conference @CAPS2 had to talk to some people and sign-up but he had to sit in a longer ??? from his dad. When it came to playing baseball @CAPS2 quit because he was a ??? he was at the bottom of the batting line up and he only played out feild so when ??? hit a homerun over his head he dropped his miton he field and walked of.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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I was patience wen I wanted my thot @NUM1 and I hod to wait to my b-day to get it I was patience to get my new fone but I had to be good and school and that was hard for me because I use to all ways be bad and staff like that I use to want everything but I use to have to be patience and I use to always be good to get it.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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@CAPS1 Patient! @CAPS2 @CAPS10 yelled as I was almost bouncing of the walls waiting for @CAPS2 friend to get to @CAPS2 house. I get @CAPS3 I just cant wait! @CAPS10 its @CAPS2 first time what do you expect! I told @CAPS2 @CAPS10. DING @CAPS4! The door bell rang and I sprinted to the door. @CAPS5! @CAPS6! @CAPS5 exclaimed. @CAPS8 you guys need to go wait in the garage for @CAPS18 @CAPS9. @CAPS10 said. @CAPS11! we said in harmony. We out the door and @CAPS3 was pitch dark. I cant see, hold me! I screamed in terror. All we saw was head lights and we knew @CAPS3 was @CAPS2 @CAPS18 @CAPS9. Are you guys ready its almost @CAPS13 @CAPS14 and we gotta leave or we want make @CAPS3 to @CAPS15 @CAPS16! @CAPS2 @CAPS18 @CAPS9 was excited. Just hearing that word, @CAPS15 @CAPS21 was the @CAPS22 to getting there @CAPS23 thing was great but at @CAPS15 @CAPS16 You gotta have a lot of @CAPS21.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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One of the greatest ways for a person to have patience is when you are being hunted down in a game of paintball. I have had experience once, and I hope it never happens again. I was playing paintball with a lot of my friends, and if I was not patient, I would have ended up getting shot in the head with paint. I was in a small forest, breathing hard after a close encounter, and I was behind a really thin tree. I had eliminated everyone except for one.I started breathing harder, because he was right by the tree I was leaning against. I decided I would come close to sacrificing myself if I just stood there, so I climbed up the tree.I was lucky I had a camoflage shirt on, because if I didnt blend in, I would get shot. I was deep in the tree, but it wouldnt have mattered, because I was too heavy for any of the branches. I fell out of the tree, but as I was falling, I shot the enemy in the leg. I had won! That is how patience rewards you.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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I was patient a few years ago with my brother @PERSON1. It was almost his birthday, and he was very excited. He was excited because he wanted a flying toy helicopter he had seen while watching television, the helicopter was very expensive, and I did not know if he was getting it for his birth day or not .He wanted me to tell him if he was getting it so he kept bugging me. I wanted to yell at him or hit him, he was so annoying .I did not, because I knew if I did I would get in trouble. So I made up a game to play with him so he would forget about the helicopter and stop asking me. It didnt work, because he kept on asking me any way. I made up another game where you have to jump on the trampoline and spin your arms like a helicopter and not fall over. Finally he stopped asking me about the helicopter and after we ate cake, we actually had to remind him about it. When he opened his presents, he did get a helicopter. We spent the rest of the day trying to make it fly.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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One night when I got home from cheer I was starving, and the dinner wasnt even on the grill. We were having steak, brown rice, and mack and chees. To past time I went upstairs to take a shower I took ten minutes to take a shower and it still wasnt ready. So I did some homework. I did math, reading, and I study for a test. The mack and chees was ready the steak was almost ready and the brown rice wasnt even close to being ready. I was so hungry and tried, but I keeped my patient. Oh my gosh the food smelt so yummy. I wanted to eat right then. I was so hungry that I had to put gum into my mouth to keep my mouth busy. Two minutes later the steak was ready mack and chees was ready but we are still waiting for the brown rice. My sister and I set the table and pourd our drinks I still had my patient. Five minutes later the food was ready. All four of us sat down at the dinner table and ate. Oh my gosh it was so yummy. I had two little pieces of steak, three scoups of rice, I love rice, and a tiny piece of mack and chees. The dinner was awesome. After that dinner I went strait up to bed.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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One time I was very patient. We were on a train going to @LOCATION1. I didn't have my game or music player. It fit live it would never spend, @CAPS2 I didn't complane.I sat in the seat for what felt like forever. Then when we got off the train I said "@CAPS1. I'm done."@CAPS2 then there was the bus ride to the musem of science one histry. Not as in thout to myself. Once agin stop after stop we went. Untill finally we got their. It was amazing, there were tons of interesting things like amiten that made tops or @CAPS3. @CAPS2 then patience are ?? when we went to the history. It was the train allover agin. Dad had to see everything and anything ??? Then we had to take the bus back to the train. Next the trained agin. @CAPS2 this time I had a top by that got boring so I still didn't complain. @CAPS2 dad said it has to long and I would be able to bring my os next time. That is my example of pacience.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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I want to say I found her, tex right away but I didnt. I learned something though yeah it took @ORGANIZATION1 and all the other @CAPS1 (@CAPS2 intelligence) for me to piece it together. But love is, love is patient if you rtun to it it probably wont stay with you but if wait and are patient maybe, just maybe itll come to you. I just have make sure Im somewhere she can find me. said church. @NUM1 year later. @CAPS3 whats thhhiiis. @CAPS4 said I know what this is can I just shut the door for the night? @CAPS5 @PERSON1. @CAPS6, Patience @PERSON1 were waiting for @CAPS7. @CAPS8 replied. @CAPS3 here he comes now @CAPS10, @CAPS10. @CAPS11 what I found I church. @CAPS6 @CAPS4 you found the @CAPS1. Capture wait hes in. do you think we have to wait for it to unlock. When will it do that unlocky openy thing. I dont know we will have to wait and see. That is if it will open.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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One time my friend @PERSON1 was at my house and we were playing halo. We were having a very good time. We ate popcorn, drank alot of pop and ate alot of candy. Then @PERSON1 had to go to the bathroom. He was there for a wile and suddenly I had to go the bathroom. Iwaited and waited and had to go very bad. I was very polite and patient because I never yelled at him or knocked on the door telling him to hurry up, I did ask him once if was ok and said yes after that I just waited, then he came out and @CAPS1 a very big realife
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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Patience, what do you think when you hear that word? When I was little I always thought it would be simply impossible to have a thing like that, but after I badly hurt my ankle and was pat in a cast and on crutches for four months, I really got the hang of it. My mom would always say patience is vertue, have you ever wondered what it takes to have patience? Well its really just the ability to control your self, you have to be able to get through tough situations and still be controlling yourself, and you really have to control yourself when people annoy you of things take awhile
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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At the doctor their were a lot of people se we decided to stay and wait. Also my mom and my dad went with me and my sister to the doctor. Furthermore my sister and I wanted to go outside and play but my parents said no so we watch tv my mom was reading magazine and my dad is reading newspaper. Finally their were a little ??? left so after the person go to the doctor call out my name and my sister so my dad and mom went with us. So my sister dont get scared they just did check ups after that my dad paid and we left home that how we were being patience.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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17,916
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One day I had to wait in a line for @NUM1 hours just to get on a roler coaster @CAPS1 hot very paicent so I just fell asleep while standing with my eyes open. My mom had to have paicents so i just fell asleep while standing with my eyes open. My mom had to have patient when we were in traffic to get to the camping grounds. We had to wait @NUM2 hours just to get out of traffic but mom didnt freek out or anything.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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17,917
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One time his years is seem a lay that was at the front of the lunch line and he was just about to go in but he had to go to the in because he wasn't all the way in the line. As he got sent to the in he had got mad but he went to the in but he was patient she didn't advice and next thing the new he was at the front of the line. I think that being patience mean when you are calm and you don't rush things and next thing you no you would be the next one
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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17,918
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Patience is about waiting for something for a long time. If you have patience that is good for you here is a time where i had patience. Last year in @DATE1 after school my dad and I went hunting for deer in @CAPS1. He went to this homeguards blind that we found sat in chair waiting for a deer to come along. You have to have patience while going hunting . We didnt see anything but then a deer came along and my dad he got ready and he said cover your ear then he shot but we didnt see any sign of deer blood so he must have missed,then we packed up and went home.That is the time i had patience to go hunting with my dad but we didnt get anything though.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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17,919
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A time that I was patient is when I broke my foot. It was a @DATE1 when I was at the park. I was climbing a pole to ring the bell when I slide. My little brother came running over their and I told him to go and get help. He had no idea where to go so I lied on the ground with a broken foot for over @NUM1. when my brother returned he asked where do I go? And I told him to go to the gas station across the street and ask to use the telephone I was trying to be patient when he got back he had my mom. My mom said that I was really patient. She picked me up and we drove to the emergency room. When we got there it was packed. They got us in as soon as they could but it felt like along time to me. When he called my name my mom picked me up and she went toward the doctor. He asked what brings you here? we told him the news and he took into the room. The doctor moved my foot around. Ten minutes later he came back in with the x-rays and annoced to us that my foot was broken. He gave me a cast and crushes and then we left. I told my brother thank you and gave him really big hug. The next day everyone at school said that I was brave and very patient and I said thank you!
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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17,920
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One time I was patient when I was in @LOCATION1 getting on a ride called "@CAPS1 @CAPS2 parents @CAPS3." @CAPS4 was a @CAPS5 long line and I'm usually saying "@CAPS6 on!" Or sometimes "@CAPS7's go!" @CAPS8, I was being @CAPS5 patient in the line. I was proud of my self and so was my mom. That was the time I was being patient.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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17,921
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Tic tak times tiking I was patient one time it was in the doctors office my oppment was at two and I had to wait and wait and wait and wait I sat there until it was @NUM1 and they finnly called me in. Once again I had to wait and wait again. So I was trying so hard to be patient and trust me it is not easy for me at least because I cant even sit there for @NUM2 minitues and stay still I have to move aroud so it was hard to sit there lisening to the sound tik tok for a while. And that was the time I was pacient it was hard to belive but I did it. The hardest part was when you here one off those tiker clocks go tik tok and I was stinn there for a while now you absolutely now that for some people incuding me. It is sometime hard for you to be pacient some times its ok to be pocient and sometimes its so hard to be pacit and sit there and oh absolutely noting, so that is my story arbout the time I was pacient and was not inpocit sitting there doning noting not conplaning wating to and @CAPS1 mazines.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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One time when I was patient was when there was a twenty two hour corride to florida. It was me, my cousin, my two sisters, and my parents. It was very boring. I was sitting in the back with my sister, and we kept fighting for foot space. Around five hours in, I was feeling cramped. We stopped off for dinner, then were on the road again. When it started to become night, the road froze and we stopped off and slept in the car. We woke up during sunrise and went to cracker barrel for breakfest. It was delicious. Then we got back into the car and drove the rest of the way to florida. It @MONTH1 have been a long drive, but it was worth it.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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17,923
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Some people say that if somebodys trying to annoy you and you are patient then they will stop, but thats not always true. One day my brother was down loading new ringtones, which I thought was no big dig deal until he downloaded the mosquito tone. The mosquito tone is a loud highpitched noise that only people under a certain age can hear. Its really funny if you the one playing it but if your listening to it. it hurts your ears and gives you a headache. So one day my brother has this idea. the one only a jerk could have. he decides hes going to follow me around playing it as loud as it goes. It was terrible, it made my blood curtle. After thirty minutes I decided to call my but it didnt really help. Then I listened to music, so he turned it up. Then I had this amazing idea. I stole his battery. The next day I made a deal with him. If he would stop playing that ringtone I would give him back his battery. Of cource he said yes so I didnt have to the tone anymore. So now you know why patience doesnt always work.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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I was patient for a whole @DATE1. Although, that was only because @CAPS2 mother had promised to purchase me a brand new video game system. This new video game system was the wii. For @CAPS5 had just come and had me interested the first time I saw @CAPS5. @CAPS5 was comoletely doctor and had advanced graphics. I had informed @CAPS2 mother about this system immediately. "@CAPS1, I will buy @CAPS5 for you, considering your report card was exceptional." @CAPS2 mother had guarenteed me. "@CAPS3! Thanc you mother," I had exclaimed excitedly. Now I was getting @CAPS2 hopes up and expecting @CAPS5 within @CAPS6 weeks. Although I had done that only to later on dissapoint myself. @CAPS2 mother had informed us that I was to get @CAPS5 in between the time period of one to the months. "@CAPS4 @CAPS5" I had shouted. " @CAPS6 months?" "@CAPS3 @CAPS6 months I don't have enough time to thank about that stuff, there are more important things to consider," @CAPS2 mother explained. So that is what started the longest period of patiently waiting in @CAPS2 entire life. After appioximontly one and a half months of waiting, @CAPS2 mother had finally and, "@CAPS9 are going to @CAPS10 today to buy your wii"". At that very moment. I led nearly exploded from happiness. "@CAPS3! " @CAPS12 I had started in do a dance that no one understood not even me. So when @CAPS9 pulled up to @CAPS2 favorite video game retail store, I was so excited I couldn't sit still. "@CAPS13 down! Geez, @CAPS5's just a video game system!" I @CAPS12 stopped immediatly. "That's what you @CAPS14." I mumbled to myself. When @CAPS9 had returned home, I had kept playing until @TIME1. So that is when I learned @CAPS5 pays off when your patient.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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Patience is hard for me because I have almost no patients for anything! So you can imagine how hard it was for me and anyone else who has no patience waiting in lines at disneyland. First of all the drive- it was horrible and long. We were in the car for what seemed like forever before we finally got there. I tried my best to be patient and I wa s. I didnt complain at all. When we got to disneyland the firs day the lines were terrible! Some of the waits were up t @NUM1 hours long! Well i didnt complain,but it was hard not to!My little brother wanted to go on all these kid rides that the lines were huge for , but i held my patients not wanting to get anyone upset. Since I like everything to get done fast and not waste my time waiting i felt like i was going to explode at dinner. Dinner was a this seafood resteraunt wich was bad anyway because i hate seafood!while all this waiting was happening I kept my patience even when it took an hour to get our meals! Even worse was waiting for the disney busses to get back to your hotel. My mom and dad said they were very proud of me keeping my patients through all of the waiting. I learned all lot of things there. One disneyland is not a good place for people like me who are not very patient. Second patients is one of the hardest things in life, but some of the best things in life require you to have patience. So,thats @NUM2 time I had to have a lot of patients, but i realized patients is a good thing to have.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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Tick and tock went the second of my watch and I went on, the fifet te oct far and it was wait people come in a out of the nir or with presnt and box give tree candy. Cote qinges dont fill up lot and lot of people. On a bolt the airpant I weat to the wid no and list to the ride like a hout latebile celove. And the most faist think happiy let my bag. At deivent soa wauly. I went back to the air prot and I went home. In contemns I was patience. In conteing I was patience I the cathiner and at air port and nevier and what is patience is all about.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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One day I went to a concert at @ORGANIZATION1 and there was a very long line. While I was in the line there was this girl who had no patient cause we had to wait in line for @NUM1 1/@NUM1 hours when that time past we all went to get our spots and before we had did that there was this long line again but even longer but it was ok cause I had patients. With all this patients it reminded me of my mom when she went to the doctors office for @NUM3 hours and I had to wait in his waiting room. And also I went to my living room with my mom and she just started talking on the phone and she told me to hold on but my sister kept on interrupting her and I told her you need to hold on and let mom finish talking on the phone so she ran up the stair and she said your stupid punk so I said I dont care.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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17,930
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I remember the time I was patient with my parents. It started when I saw this game I wanted at the store. Kindly I asked my dad to get it for so he said he would get it for on the following weekend. So I had to be patient and wait for the weekend to come. I was so excited about getting the new game that I mentioned it a lot not remembering my dad telling me not to tell my mom. Well the weekend finally came and when I asked my dad was he ready to go he said no. When I asked my dad why not he said it was because I didnt keep my mouth shut so my mom didnt want me to have it at the moment. Now I was angry of course because my mom always says nor has something to say to my dad and me when I get a game. Just then my dad walked in the room and said maybe tomorrow that so happened to be @DATE1 he said. I could borrow money from my grandma and get it then. Thats exactly what I did and I got my game. Later my dad gave her back her money and we were all happy. The point is that it took a lot patience to get my reward.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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Being patient as a kid is never really easy. I know lur lne being patient is like taking a baby's lollipop away from mom il just not pretty. But one time l really had to use my patience. Now it wasn't easy at all waiting in line at kings' island @NUM1 hours just to go on illegible. Socio. We waited about another @NUM2 minutes maybe @NUM3 minutes and yes! It started working again. So many people had left us was nicor because me line shortned some, but it was still probably going to be a long wait. It was nice when we got in the building because it was nice and air-conditioned. We sat around warning and waiting debating on wheiner or not. We wanted to stay or leave we ended up staying and waiting for which seemed like forever! Until we stepped into the space snottle. There was another room we had to go through to get to the ride. Finally. The out was over! Using my patience and waiting inline forever really payed off in the end. It was a great ride.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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@PERSON1, this is boring! I want to try my backflip! I whined. @CAPS1, you're not ready yet, just wait. If you wait and practice more, it will be easier," said @PERSON1, as she spotted one of the other gymnasts in their back-hard-spring. We had been working on our back-hard-springs for weeks and I was the best at them, in the class. We had to wait another two weeks until we started on our back flips, but I really wanted to try it out. I rolled my eyes at @ORGANIZATION1's answer, and continued to practice my back-hard-springs. I was doing them down the wedge, and in the middle of each one, I'd do a little roll for fun. Someone called @PERSON1 so she walked out of the gym to talk to them. Just because she was my coach, didn't mean that she should tell me when I should, or shouldn't do my back flip. I really wanted to try it, and @PERSON1 was out of the room, so it was my chance. I took a deep breath and lunged into my backflip. As I glided through the air, the thought that I never learned how to land my flip crossed my mind, and I landed on my ankle. "@CAPS2!" I yelled. I tried to stand up, but I couldn't; my ankle hurt so bad! @PERSON1 ran into the gym as I fell, after attempting to stand up. "@CAPS3 happened?" "I tried my back flip." "I told you not to! If you were patient, and waited till I showed you how to do one, this wouldn't have happened!" "@CAPS4â¦" "I'll go get an ice pack." @CAPS5 since that day, I have had problems with my ankle. If I had been patient, I wouldn't have gotten hurt, and I would still be in gymnastics, @CAPS6 then on, I've known that being patient is the right thing to do."
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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17,933
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@CAPS1 story of patient One time I was patient was when I went to the @CAPS2 for a check-up. Me and @CAPS1 dad have wait in the lobby for ?? time, after every ?? went in for the appointments. I couldnt take it no more, but he made me stay. So I kept quiet. Well, most of the time really I wanted to say something really bad but instead I held it in. So finally we went in I was so happy. It was like I was the happiest man on earth. Thats @CAPS1 story about patience.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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A time when I was patient was when my mom took my sisters shoping. My dad was at work and my mom took me and my older sisters shoping it was boring but it was kind of full because some of clothes in the store had boys on one side and girls on the other. One store only had girl clothes which I hated. But I didn't say anything after that since I was so patient my my asked me where to you want to go? I said to best buy I got a game it was colloge football oq. When you have patient's it can pay off in the end and always have patiens where ever you go or are always have patients.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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I am patent i always have to wait for somthing or earn it. I go to my grouping with my parents but I have to wat. I have to wait to go to my aunts. The worst time to wat is going to @CAPS1/a up @LOCATION1 and camping.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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One time I was patient for the doctors and I had a great time. Another time I was patient, I was at the dentest. My therd time I was patient when I was going to @ORGANIZATION1 and it was boring waiting but I was patient. Last but not least I was patient to go on the tower of terror. It was the funest ride there.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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Patience is important in life. Something when you dont have patience things tend to go wrong and thats not always a good thing so here are somethings when you do not have patience. If you dont have patience you can get into trouble. For example if you were in a long line for something and you couldnt talk because if you did talk you would get in trouble. So if you didnt have any patience you would probably say @CAPS1 my gosh this is taking forever. Then you would get in trouble for talking. Here is another reason why you should have patience. You should have patience for an example if you didnt you would need patience if you were sick and you went to the doctors office and there was a really long line you would probably say for get it and then go home. So if you went home you would get even more sick and that would get even more sick and that would be bad. Finally, another reason on if you didnt have patience. For example say you wanted to go the mall and bye a new pair of shoes. You went into the store and you found a pair that you liked and they fit just right. But when you went to go check out the cash regaster didnt work so they had to call maitnence, to come and fix it and they told you that it would be an hour. So you sat and waited for twenty minutes but you did not have any patience so you said for get it and you left and didnt get the shoes. Those were some people who didnt have patience. But if they did that wouldnt of happened to them because they would of waited or needed. Having patience is a good thing but not having it is not.
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
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I sat there, staring off into the distance waiting for something to happen. I casually leaned back to my chair and propped my head toward the ceiling. I tried my best to clear my head and be paitient. But when I opened them, I was sitting on some bars in line for celar paints @ORGANIZATION1. The voices of many people ran through my ears as laughter, happiness, and danger. The line was estimates at a two hour wait, but my friend @PERSON1 and I wanted to ride the ride. We started up at the roller coaster while the sun beat down taunting us. @CAPS1 is this taking so long?! I said impatiently. @CAPS2 next time we should go during the week. Do you want to leave? @CAPS3. I fought with myself to be patient for the ride. The line slowly scooted forth. Beads of sweat formed on my forehead. I wanted to remain patient, so I pulled out my music player and thought of my music. I became more willing to wait. But before I knew it, people were yelling at us to move forward. Embarrassed, I jammed my music player in my pocket. But the line moved a tremendous amount. It had been about an hour and forty minutes when we were in the place to get on. I was proud of being patient. We looked at the ride and hopped on. Patience really pays off. I learned to be patient with all sorts of things.
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| 3
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| 3
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
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Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
| 10,779
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17,940
| 7
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I am all way patient wen I hunt and fish. I always go hunting I find a spot and setor clmeit in a tree. I waet for along time for deer and trukey and @CAPS1. Some times you dont see anything at all. The key is get out early and be patient. The most of the time I usely see @NUM1 deer wen its deer sesson wen I go out . How I see them alot is being patient a lot.
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| 4
| 8
| 1
| 1
| 1
| 1
| 1
| 1
| 1
| 1
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
|
Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
| 10,780
|
17,941
| 7
|
One time when I was patient was when I was waiting for my fitted, mirror, league hats to come in the mail. They so, dit would only take @NUM1 ??? days so, I said ok thats not to so days flew by and hats were supposed to come in the mail that day so when us truck came by I was so exited but there was a box for my mom.@CAPS1. I said I was really, so planted but I thought to myself they i.e. come tomorrow and??? the didnt come so I as stil patient but close to not being two more days past so I just gave up then one day when I got home from my friends house they were there yes, finally all my patients payed off and thats the time I had patients.
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| 8
| 15
| 2
| 2
| 2
| 1
| 2
| 2
| 2
| 2
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
|
Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
| 10,781
|
17,942
| 7
|
A time when I was patient was when my favorit @ORGANIZATION1 of the year comes, the @ORGANIZATION1. I had waited patiently all year counting down the days till @DATE1 reading books and homework where almost done with for another year. You could smell the tension in the air as everyone watched the clock spin on the last @ORGANIZATION1 of school. As the hours went by @ORGANIZATION1, seconds, @CAPS1 , @ORGANIZATION2, every one grew restless, but I was patient; I sat, I waited, I listened, I read, but nothing compared to hot final moment where the bell round and the students cheered. A smile on everyones faces as they left the door for the final time that year.
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| 11
| 20
| 2
| 2
| 3
| 2
| 2
| 3
| 3
| 3
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Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
|
Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
| 10,782
|
17,943
| 7
|
Ok, ink to start o yeah this is the good one once mom no no one day no ok some years some time back I had to be patient for my phone and it was my first phone I how to be good. It was band new phone it just came out and I had to have if I nid a lot around the house and school to my mom said I can get it next week and I was dertmined to get it so the next week @NUM1 im so happy but she said next week @DATE1. Im just doing what I was doin what I was saposd to be doin and on that @DATE1 I was so happy I got in trouble and I still got paid for doin my house work did not have at some did some help with the next door people and got some more and got the phone that take a long time but that. That is my patient story.
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| 6
| 10
| 1
| 1
| 1
| 1
| 2
| 2
| 1
| 1
|
Ideas (points doubled):
0: ideas are not focused on the task and/or are undeveloped.
1: Tells a story with ideas that are minimally focused on the topic and developed with limited and/or general details.
2: Tells a story with ideas that are somewhat focused on the topic and are developed with a mix of specific and/or general details.
3: Tells a story with ideas that are clearly focused on the topic and are thoroughly developed with specific, relevant details.
Organization:
0: No organization evident.
1: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are weak.
2: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are logically sequenced.
3: Organization and connections between ideas and/or events are clear and logically sequenced.
Style:
0: Ineffective use of language for the writer's purpose and audience.
1: Limited use of language, including lack of variety in word choice and sentences, may hinder support for the writer's purpose and audience.
2: Adequate command of language, including effective word choice and clear sentences, supports the writer's purpose and audience.
3: Command of language, including effective and compelling word choice and varied sentence structure, clearly supports the writer's purpose and audience.
Conventions:
0: Ineffective use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.
1: Limited use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
2: Adequate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
3: Consistent, appropriate use of conventions of Standard English* for grammar, usage, spelling, capitalization, and punctuation for the grade level.
|
Write about patience. Being patient means that you are understanding and tolerant. A patient person experience difficulties without complaining.
Do only one of the following: write a story about a time when you were patient OR write a story about a time when someone you know was patient OR write a story in your own way about patience.
| 10,783
|
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