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[EU] Four fictional characters visiting Disney World decide to room in a hotel together to save money.
*God damn him and that incessant finger twirl.* He was out parading around in an outfit that would have fit right in at that park. Between the boots, denim, and hat you would think he had come out of the Lone Ranger. These things weren't even what stood out on the man. He was missing two fingers on his right hand, the ...
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[EU] Four fictional characters visiting Disney World decide to room in a hotel together to save money.
I'm going to do this tomorrow. I am going to od a theme of "Characters that wear red." Because I already have picked three of them Deadpool, The Flash, Red Riding Hood and The Queen of Hearts (She's associated with red)
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[EU] Four fictional characters visiting Disney World decide to room in a hotel together to save money.
Severus Snape was a double agent for two fools. Voldemort wanted him as an advance scout on a Muggle resort in America, his first intended target after conquering Britain even though it was thousands of miles away and no witches or wizards lived within a thousand miles of it; Dumbledore wanted him to stop him, and to u...
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[WP] Tell the life story of a dollar bill.
I feel like this exists somewhere already. Does anyone know about it? Best I could find was some high school project with a similar idea.
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[WP] Tell the life story of a dollar bill.
I’ve been in the hands of Queens, Presidents and legends. I’ve been in the hands of beggars, buskers and criminals. I’ve been loved. I’ve been hated. I’ve been in the mouths of dogs and the claws of cats. I make the world go ‘round. I am one. I am many. I am everywhere. I’m even in your back pocket. -059
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[WP] Tell the life story of a dollar bill.
Winter. Cold. My fibers stiffen, my face cracks. I am unworthy - I am trash. I had a home once; my own sanctuary. Never a dull moment as I spent the days with my twin. Then, one day - I was betrayed, sold away like a rag doll too old to be used, too necessary to be tossed aside. As the mouth of my keeper's safe haven...
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[WP] You're back home for your high school reunion. Leaving hotel for the event, elevator stops and in walks the girl you had a crush on for most of HS. She's even more gorgeous now.
She was absolutely drop-dead gorgeous. Always had been. I almost walked into her on my way out the elevator and stopped. She looked me in the eyes and said, "In ten years this place hasn't changed, has it?" I pondered her question, and noticed a light hanging above us. I was the Intercontinental Hotel in downtown Chica...
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[IP] The Clockwork City
We lived in a clockwork city. We never liked it but a bit. The parts all went together. But the people never fit!
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[IP] The Clockwork City
The shuttle slowly descended and the city finally came into view, before I even had the chance to speak, my escort answers my question. "No, the clockwork does not turn, it's merely there for artistic decor and design." I turned away from her and again immerse myself with the scenery, "So this is the city of andro...
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[IP] The Clockwork City
"Inspector Kerensky? A Man is here to see you." He lowers the newspaper he was reading. He can tell that the secretary stressed the word man, with a capital M. Folding the paper, he places it at the corner of his desk. "Send him in, Mrs. Larsen." The precinct's secretary disappears from his office. A minute later a Ma...
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[IP] The Clockwork City
When I asked granny about the city, why it looked so odd, and who had made it, she told me a story. " A long time ago, long before I was born, this world was not like it was now. There were no people living here, it was a dead land. We used to live in the stars. This place was nothing but an anchor, my granny said, ...
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[WP] A man wishes his Genie had a Genie of his/her own.
Thick pillowing smoke in all shades of blue suddenly filled the room as if the lamp had somehow contained the eruption of any great volcano. Peter jumped and dropped the lamp, his vision consumed by smoke not even a second after. If peter were to think back on that moment now, he would feel quite opposite to how he fel...
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[WP] You're interviewing a sweet, lovable old couple retiring from decades of running a popular small business. They admit to doing something illegal.
"Hi, Mr. and Mrs. Hagard. How are you?" "Well," Mrs. Hagard says. They sit in their seats like children, sinking into the cushions, looking up at me with small, sweet smiles. Their bodies may be old, but their eyes are young. "Do you want to start?" "Yes, dear. Go ahead." Mrs. Hagard says. Q: How long have you been...
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[FF] Write a story where the first word in each sentence starts with a letter coming after the previous in the alphabet. Minimum sentences: 23 Maximum: 26 Details in description.
Adam Baxter peered out his window by the bed at puddles gathering on Lake Street. Before going to sleep last night, he resolved to finally get something done today, to do something useful with his time. Cathy, his mother, called him the other day, telling him to focus on the little things in life. Depression gave him a...
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[FF] Write a story where the first word in each sentence starts with a letter coming after the previous in the alphabet. Minimum sentences: 23 Maximum: 26 Details in description.
All you can eat buffet was a misleading name. Barely 20 minutes after he sat down, Max found that the foods he desired were no longer being refilled. Crab legs, steak, dumplings, all of them had empty trays where the food was supposed to be. Down the street, Max's brother Major was enjoying a warm meal at their apartme...
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[FF] Write a story where the first word in each sentence starts with a letter coming after the previous in the alphabet. Minimum sentences: 23 Maximum: 26 Details in description.
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[FF] Write a story where the first word in each sentence starts with a letter coming after the previous in the alphabet. Minimum sentences: 23 Maximum: 26 Details in description.
Hmm, I haven't written in a while. I guess I'll give this one a shot. -------------- The vein in his forehead was throbbing again. Usually, that meant he was really about something, and I didn't want to find out what it was, because Papa was never very friendly when he was upset. Veins throbbing meant that I should ...
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[FF] Write a story where the first word in each sentence starts with a letter coming after the previous in the alphabet. Minimum sentences: 23 Maximum: 26 Details in description.
Another absent anode. Bolts, busted. Crystal chip cracked. Dilatant deflectors, destroyed; died dutifully defending diaphragm, ditched during diversion. Elizabeth erased eyelids' emerging effluence. Forward; frazzled fortnights fixing full facemask, fitting firearms, feverishly figuring fearsome fighting finish. Go g...
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[FF] Write a story where the first word in each sentence starts with a letter coming after the previous in the alphabet. Minimum sentences: 23 Maximum: 26 Details in description.
About to seal his fate, Eric pauses. Brandy has been on his mind since they day he first saw her, and this would be the exact day where their relationship changes forever. Could she say no, after all this time? Does she care for him the same way that he cares for her? Everything she had shown to him, everything she had...
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[WP] A literal murder of crows
"What do we got, Jim?" asked Detective Murray. The question had become so routine that the sentence congealed into a single word -- "whaddoowegahggim." "Mass shooting. Nasty shit, Ed," said Smith, his partner, who had arrived on the scene ten minutes earlier. "Walk me through it." Detective Smith led Murray over to ...
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[WP] Amelia Earhart did not die. Instead, after she crashes, she discovers the lost City of Atlantis, where she spends the remainder of her time because she is unable to leave.
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[WP] Amelia Earhart did not die. Instead, after she crashes, she discovers the lost City of Atlantis, where she spends the remainder of her time because she is unable to leave.
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[WP] Amelia Earhart did not die. Instead, after she crashes, she discovers the lost City of Atlantis, where she spends the remainder of her time because she is unable to leave.
Year..I don't know anymore. I'm tired of the experiments. Who would have thought that the City of Atlantis was filled with fishsticks? I call them fishsticks; they are thin, scaly and smell terrible. Reminds me of boiling cabbage soup from my youth. Day after day, I am a spectacle to crowds of gawkers. Not for my h...
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[WP] Amelia Earhart did not die. Instead, after she crashes, she discovers the lost City of Atlantis, where she spends the remainder of her time because she is unable to leave.
The last thing I remember are the instruments going haywire. I couldn't gauge my altitude. At times it felt like I was dropping for ages and I would try going up on the steering, but who knows if it did anything at all. I woke up in a bed made of nicely fashioned stone. The drapes on the wall were a lovely, comfortin...
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[WP] Amelia Earhart did not die. Instead, after she crashes, she discovers the lost City of Atlantis, where she spends the remainder of her time because she is unable to leave.
As the early morning sun dyed the sands gold, Amelia paced the shores yet again, kicking over any mounds of sand that seemed too tall and inspecting the various bits of garbage the ocean had washed in. "At it again?" Asked a tall, dark skinned man, walking up beside her, in a language that has long been forgotten. H...
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[WP] Amelia Earhart did not die. Instead, after she crashes, she discovers the lost City of Atlantis, where she spends the remainder of her time because she is unable to leave.
Unable to leave? Or doesn't *want* to leave..?
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[WP] Amelia Earhart did not die. Instead, after she crashes, she discovers the lost City of Atlantis, where she spends the remainder of her time because she is unable to leave.
Dearest George, I find myself writing you this letter, though I see no possible circumstance where you will get to read it, for I... I'm lost, George. You must forgive me for being so uncharacteristically sentimental, but I believe the situation might call for it. A few months ago now, I remember hitting the sea, ha...
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[IP] That Which Was Taken
It's funny how the mind works. Even in the midst of all this, all she could think about was rings. Engagement rings. Not the freezing rain pouring off her poncho. Not the way the lasers refracted through the falling water towards her. Not even the cold dead weight of the grenade in her right hand. Instead her mind went...
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[IP] That Which Was Taken
[Source.](http://omen2501.deviantart.com/art/Rain-67116328)
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A person on the first settlement to mars begins to regret their decision and wants to return home to earth. Its a one way ticket. Make this person go crazy!
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[WP] A man living an inadequate life slowly begins to lose his memories, while gradually they are replaced with memories of a much more full filling life.
June 28th 2008 Well, I guess I'm approaching death now. 87 years old. The birthday was uneventful, not that anyone was there. Phil came down to my room for a bit and we talked about our lives. Really I just wished I'd done more. Sure, I had friends and a loving wife, but they're gone now, and all I have are my memorie...
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[WP] A man living an inadequate life slowly begins to lose his memories, while gradually they are replaced with memories of a much more full filling life.
Rain. All my life is and ever has been in rain. Both in the literal and that metaphorical bullshit sense. Even now it's bloody raining. That stinging rain that covers everything in seconds and is only a couple of degrees away from hail. My first memory is sitting inside and looking out at the swing in the garden. A li...
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[WP] A man living an inadequate life slowly begins to lose his memories, while gradually they are replaced with memories of a much more full filling life.
[meta] This sounds like the plot to the game [To The Moon](http://freebirdgames.com/to_the_moon/). Is that what inspired you, OP?
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[WP]Kris and Jaime are throwing a costume party! Everyone dresses as a different emotion (e.g., green with envy, etc.), until someone shows up as the worst emotion...
Jaime and Kris's party had been a happy affair. It was a themed event: guests were to arrive dressed as emotions. Jaime had attended as Happiness, wearing a suit with a bright orange pattern on it. His best friend, Clara, had chosen to dress as love; she wore only a skimpy two-piece bikini, but she had hand-painted bri...
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[CC] The Story of the Change
I thought this was really well done -- great concept. The only thing that was a bit off was that the Children's body parts were singular. I do understand that the Children are a singular entity formed from multiple minds, but using singular verbs with a plural collective noun can be a bit jarring and confusing. Other...
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[WP] A formerly blind man sees a sunrise for the first time.
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[WP] A formerly blind man sees a sunrise for the first time.
So, this was a sunrise. The old man shrugged, shading his eyes. I guess I thought it would be... I don't know. Magical. People always talk about the sunrise like it's the most beautiful thing in all the world. They write songs about it, compare their lovers to it, praise it and worship it like it was Jesus himself...
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[WP] A family moves into an Amityville horror-style house, except the spirits are intolerably bubbly and nice.
It was a good home, a bit run down, but that was to be expected from an ancient house. I would’ve enjoyed my stay there immensely, if it hadn’t been for the ghosts. When I first suspected paranormal activity, I was anticipating horrid spirits who were out for blood, and well, I was really, really wrong. For the ghosts ...
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[WP] A family moves into an Amityville horror-style house, except the spirits are intolerably bubbly and nice.
I went to the basement when she beckoned me, and looked at her and said "Wait, so this was a house in rural Georgia, that were abolitionists, and even took in stray farm animals?" "Yessum!" Charlotte replied with the sweetest southern smile any former slave could ever have. "And don't forget, we was even allowed to go ...
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[WP] Earth has found another planet's version of the 'golden record' .. write about its contents.
Not exactly to the prompt, but meh. _____________ Smoke was rising from the crater in the middle of Joilet Street. The loud crash had awoken the whole neighborhood, and they all gathered around the newest pothole, waiting for Jack report what he had happened. "Hey, can somebody help me! I'm stuck!" Jack's voice call...
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[WP] The components for sentience are successfully installed in an android moments before the nuclear armageddon occurs. Years later, the android wakes up in the wasteland.
So this is what it feels like. Feels cold. My sensors must be malfunctioning. I should get that looked at. Perhaps Creator will fix them for me. He always fixes me; it is stored in my memory that he does. It is also stored that he usually is there when I wake. Perhaps it's more than my sensors that are off. If I boo...
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[WP] The components for sentience are successfully installed in an android moments before the nuclear armageddon occurs. Years later, the android wakes up in the wasteland.
Day 879: Solar cell recharged 99.8% Day 880: Solar cell recharged 99.9% Day 881: FULL CHARGE - Initiate Reboot. Reboot stalled for memory purge. Memory purge - Process corrupted. Initiate reboot. Reboot. Module loaded: Main Module Module loaded: Transportation system protocols Module loaded: Pittsburgh T...
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[WP] You have a mythological creature for a pet, and no one knows about it until you are suddenly discovered trying to hide it.
"Oh wow, it's a real Goblin" Jenny remarked. It had wrinkly skin and a long hook nose, stood about 3 feet high and looked mighty peeved. Jenny reached out a hand, trying to pet it, but the goblin spit in her face. "I'm 235 years old, missy" the Goblin scowled. "I'm not a pet." "No, Jeremy," Donald yelled. "BAD Jeremy...
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[WP] You have a mythological creature for a pet, and no one knows about it until you are suddenly discovered trying to hide it.
The officious little pillock from the council knocked on my door at 8am on a Saturday. I wondered what he was doing out here in the sticks, no one normally bothered me, apart from those really committed Jehovah's witnesses. Those mad bastards would ride their bikes down my rutted 2 kilometer long driveway every week, j...
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[WP] You have a mythological creature for a pet, and no one knows about it until you are suddenly discovered trying to hide it.
The minotaur was eating cereal calmly, not really looking over toward us. Other was, just a normal morning. Except for the person standing awkwardly towards the door who looks like he's about to panic at any moment. "So... a minotaur huh?" He says, "Where did you say you got him?" "Oh i found him." i reply. "Wait, wh...
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[WP] You have a mythological creature for a pet, and no one knows about it until you are suddenly discovered trying to hide it.
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[PI] Immortal Game - FEB CONTEST
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[PI] Immortal Game - FEB CONTEST
I totally thought this was due last night and not tonight. I was scrambling and ultimately thought I submitted it 3 minutes late. I'm a dummy.
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[PI] Immortal Game - FEB CONTEST
I've read up to chapter 7 so far, loving this concept. It reminds me a little of Tad William's Otherland series, but you've approached it differently.
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[PI] Immortal Game - FEB CONTEST
I just finished. Lengthy but well worth it, you'd have my vote if I'd written something.
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[PI] Immortal Game - FEB CONTEST
Hi! I liked your story very much. The action was very entertaining and the story quite scary. A few comments/suggestions: -- you might want to spell out what an NPC is for non-gamer readers (I know what it is but it doesn't strike me as a widely-known term to the extent that you can assume the readers will know what...
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[PI] Immortal Game - FEB CONTEST
Hello! This was a really good and well-written story. I really enjoyed the concept and this definitely left me wanting more, so hopefully you're encouraged to continue. I don't want to give anything away, but I think you did a great job with the ending. I'll just say I was definitely having suspicions towards the wrong...
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[PI] Immortal Game - FEB CONTEST
Fan-freaking-tastic. This is my favorite entry yet. I honestly wish this was a full-length novel, because I immediately found myself wanting to read more. Well done!
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[PI] Immortal Game - FEB CONTEST
I liked it. Good strong story, and a sense of place without getting hung up on details. Plenty of gore, but not without comedy.
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[PI] Immortal Game - FEB CONTEST
I think I might have just found my vote. There were punctuation and spelling issues, but every story has those. We didn't have the time to make sure that didn't happen, so I'm not even considering that as I select my vote unless it's really, really bad. Fantastic work, brother.
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[PI] Immortal Game - FEB CONTEST
Hi, this was a nicely written story that kept me interested throughout. I thought the concept was great, and the ending was just horrible/twisted enough to make it enjoyable for someone like me who really likes horror and Twilight zone-y elements. Thank you!
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[PI] Immortal Game - FEB CONTEST
I really, really enjoyed this. I was similarly fond of 'Epic' and 'Sword Art Online', which this is similar to, but this story is distinct from the two and very much it's own beast My only question is 'will there be more?' Constructive criticism - Delilah is quite dismissive of the other PCs, but it would be qood to ...
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[FF] Create a monster. Give me a biography and story about said monster in its natural habitat.
Note: I've been browsing the SCP list recently so I may have borrowed the general theme. *** SUBJECT #24 - ALIAS: PROJECT OMEGA THREAT LEVEL: Extreme CONTAINMENT: Subject #24 is to be kept separate from all other subjects (#1 -#23) in a sealed CLASS 4 container, at a mi...
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Everyone on Earth can pause time! ...except for you. [WP]
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Everyone on Earth can pause time! ...except for you. [WP]
The year is 3068. More than two centuries ago, well before my time, a great group of scientists finally worked out how to manipulate the space-time continuum. Not to discredit them, but it was of course all built upon the knowledge of our ancestors. The technology itself essentially allowed for space travel to become a...
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Everyone on Earth can pause time! ...except for you. [WP]
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This therapist is better at hiding it than the last one, but I can still tell. Most people don't bother to pay attention to it, of course. And I've heard that some spy agencies train to reduce it to nothing, or at least that's what I've read on the web. But if you watch carefully, you can tell when the person takes a ...
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Everyone on Earth can pause time! ...except for you. [WP]
There isn't a number for the amount of times I've ended up with my pants around my ankles.
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Everyone on Earth can pause time! ...except for you. [WP]
I remember the day like it was yesterday. The day when humanity inexplicably found the Gift, and then blinked itself to extinction. Well, actually, it was yesterday. Walking along the street on my way to Joe’s Neighborhood Pizzeria and Ribs, I was wearing my usual short order cook outfit, all decked out in white. By th...
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Everyone on Earth can pause time! ...except for you. [WP]
My whole life, I feel like I haven't actually moved in years.
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Everyone on Earth can pause time! ...except for you. [WP]
Dear Diary, Eliza did it to me again. A ludicrously expensive charge showed up on our joint account: $3000 for a brand-new laptop. Even though her laptop was only a year old, even though *I* *told* *her* we could not afford another one, she apparently thought she absolutely needed *another* new one. 30 seconds into my...
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Everyone on Earth can pause time! ...except for you. [WP]
People are always in motion, even when they're not. They stop and exist in their most relevant moments but even then they haven't really stopped moving. The world falls away but their minds keep moving. It’s sad really, that for as much control as we seem to have we really have no control at all. I watched a woman th...
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Everyone on Earth can pause time! ...except for you. [WP]
I don't know what's going on. But this has been a terribly strange 5 seconds.
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Everyone on Earth can pause time! ...except for you. [WP]
Damn. If I try committing suicide, will someone stop me? Would my wife stop me? Would she even care if I died? What is the meaning of our relationship if we can't share what she possesses? How am I supposed to go on, go on a daily basis of knowing that everyone around me can pause time? And in their paused time,...
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[WP] Write about a society where everyone glows when they are horny.
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[WP] Write about a society where everyone glows when they are horny.
It's weird when we look back on early 21st century history in class they always believed that the solution to the energy crisis would come from some advanced technology like fusion or solar. Instead here I am professional horny teenager helping to save the world. Of course I'm not the only one, there's over 2000 other ...
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[WP] Write about a society where everyone glows when they are horny.
I walked through the streets and saw the soft glows of many attractive young men and women, smiling and eying each other. I walked into the office and saw the man I had a deep crush on for the last five years. We talked a lot and were the best of friends, and when he started to glow around me, I thought we must be toge...
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[WP] A sane man is wrongly admitted in an asylum, struggling in vain to keep his sanity just to become like one of the other patients.
Jerry five months into yes. Me to be no when he is here and that is not to be here I see it I see it always have never to be Jerry five months he here now he leave now not here always been leaving I think I think so. tO NEVER BE INTO IT, ALWAYS FEEET WET, FEET WET FIRST NO PLUNGING i PLUNGE YOU PLUNGE WE CAN ALL DO it ...
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[WP] A sane man is wrongly admitted in an asylum, struggling in vain to keep his sanity just to become like one of the other patients.
"Where am I?" "Why am I here?" Questioned John to the group of doctors and nurses watching him as he lay bound in a strait jacket in a sponge room. The doctor turned to the nurses and said "The patient seems to be confused." He went over and told him "Don't worry, you're safe here. No one is going to hurt you here." "I...
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[OT] A suggestion to tweak the rule on erotica.
I actually have an alternate idea that I have been considering: Putting a note in the sidebar that if your response is totally nsfw and the thread is not a nsfw thread, to make a separate PI post that you mark as NSFW. This way people can still share their responses and not leave the subreddit to do so.
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(WP) A man discovers he suddenly has psychic powers, but only when he has a bowel movement, and the psychic abilities are different, and more or less intense depending on the intensity of the bowel movement, and what he ate earlier.
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[WP] Specialized magic-users now dominate the public and private job sectors. Adapt or die.
"Hi, I'll take a Mars Bar" "Alright." I said, turning around only to find the Mars Bar compartment, or for that matter, ALL the candy compartments empty. I turn back in time to see the kid running across the street with a trolley full of candy bars. Damned spoiled brats. The lucky buggers got magic implanted into th...
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A day shadowing a table in a college cafe. All of the conversations that take place there, the different types of people, and in the end; how all of their lives are connected.
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[WP] Heaven is modeled based off of internet trends.
I'm sorry I have no story, but I can only picture one thing.. Saint Pete opening the gates to find every human that had ever lived dancing to Gangnam Style.
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[WP] Heaven is modeled based off of internet trends.
"U can haz judgment." St. Peter said, flipping through his book. "e-excuse me?" I managed to stammer out. "Now this is a story about Heaven got flip-turned upside down. and I'd like to take minute, just stand right there. I'll tell you how I became the pope of may-mays." "I-I don't understand, and where's the ...
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[WP] Everyone is a hero until the radio transmits static...
"In the beginning, the invasion of Earth started with the destruction of our communications network. If not for the back up system the military used, the invasion would have been a complete rout. But, we fought them, and in the end, the blue metal-encased mechs they sent against us were destroyed. This? It was the day ...
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[WP] Everyone is a hero until the radio transmits static...
Everyone was a hero until the radios transmitted static. The world used to be connected. Cell phones, television, Twitter; information was readily and instantly available to everyone, everywhere. Ironically this connectivity only spread the panic faster. Maybe if we hadn’t been so connected it would have delayed or eve...
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[WP] Everyone is a hero until the radio transmits static...
When I asked my Uncle about War, he said that it smells like the kitchen of a woman who cannot cook. I didn't know what that meant. We gathered around the Radio to listen to the President speak. He talked about having a "clean country" and that the People's Revolutionary Party were the custodians of the country, comi...
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[CC] "I wonder," she said glancing at the knife handle poking out from her stomach and directed her gaze at him. "How long will you scream before help arrives?" He picked the wrong woman to mug.
I like it! Very descriptive - you start to almost like the male character. While he's a thief, he's also looking to end that part of his life. Also enjoyed the mystery surrounding the female. The imagery made her seem almost alien... My main critique is on the moments after she turns around. The writing seems hurried ...
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[CC] "I wonder," she said glancing at the knife handle poking out from her stomach and directed her gaze at him. "How long will you scream before help arrives?" He picked the wrong woman to mug.
There's a few grammatical/punctuation/spelling mistakes. If you'd like me to go through them all, just say the word. You have an odd way with tenses in the first paragraph, going from past to present. I enjoyed the whole business man analogy, I thought it was clever/funny. You say a material isn't leather and then ...
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[WP] Describe yourself in the third person
She sits on her armchair tapping at the keys on her laptop. The armchair is orange, with stripes that are slightly misaligned and match the curtains and an orange blanket thrown tidily over its back. The other sofas in the room are of the same design; it is a large room with a big bay window across one wall, letting in...
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[WP] Describe yourself in the third person
That guy who's always sitting in some office chair staring at a computer? Yeah, that's Himntor. He's probably too occupied playing his video games or chatting online to try talking to, although he looks very bored. It's probably best not to disturb him, he looks a bit upset most of the time. Sure likes snacking on tho...
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[WP] Describe yourself in the third person
A figure in a brown sweater hunches over the screen of a netbook in a garishly lit office. This isn't his office - he is here only as a visitor. They gave him a key and told him where the bathroom is (around the corner, on the left). This isn't his country - people speak differently here, and he is hesitant to speak hi...
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[WP] Describe yourself in the third person
As always, he lit a cigarette and started tip-tip-tip on his keyboard. The smoke sometimes gets in his eyes or his nose, but he's content the with cigarette as it focuses him, giving him a temporary Third Eye, thus seeing anything he wishes to see. He does this on purpose, sometimes, and yet it comes to him so randomly...
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[WP] Describe yourself in the third person
"Have you met him? Gifted writer..." Gifted politician. He's written two original pieces in seven years. So what if they both sold? The second one only sold because of who he got to produce it, and the first one only sold after the second one because that's the way Hollywood works. The gravy train is fired by the coal ...
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[WP] Describe yourself in the third person
She lingers at the top of the stairs, chin lifted, face proud. She wears a sweeping dress of red silk and a crown heavy with jewels balanced on top of her perfect hair. She is, in every way, perfect. The room stops and stairs. Hushed conversation is stilled as she begins, delicately, to descend the marble staircase. Ur...
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[WP] Describe yourself in the third person
Her mouth felt like an ash tray. She deserved it, though, because she was supposed to quit smoking those damned cigarettes a long time ago. She deserved to feel like shit, if only to remind her of why she was quitting in the first place. Groggily, she wiped the sleep from her eyes. A muddy haze surrounded the room, pul...
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[WP] Describe yourself in the third person
The disheveled woman pinches her upper lip between her thumb and forefinger. She always does that when she's wondering just how honest she should be. She belches, takes a sip of the coke that is helping her medication eat away her molars, and a muscle beside her nose lifts, and makes the right side of her mouth twitc...
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[WP] Describe yourself in the third person
Tall, handsome, and built like a greek god. He stands out from the crowd as he walks up to the bar, his black T-shirt fitting perfectly across his chiseled body. Smiling brightly with his perfect teeth he brushes his full and luscious head of hair back from his eyes as he calls for the barkeep's attention. The female b...
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[WP] Describe yourself in the third person
He appeared before the doorway. He looked at the slip of paper. *this is where I'm supposed to be* he thought. He placed his hand on the door handle. He didn't move another muscle. *but it's not where I want to be* suddenly his hand began to glow red and his flesh burned hot. The glow transferred to the door and it exp...
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[WP] Describe yourself in the third person
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It is her voice he notices before all else. He's not particularly aware of what she is saying. Something about conflict in the Middle East or the marathon happening on Sunday. It is not important although she seems to think that it is. She must do, to speak at such a volume that the whole room is forced to listen to he...
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A sigh that seems to go on forever, leaking more than the contents of her lungs seems to echo off the walls as she sits clad in her Taekwon-do suit that she hasn't bothered to change out of from the class she left hours ago, alone in an empty house. The emotions and turmoil curl round her like tendrils of invisible smo...
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Describe a faceless woman in 50 words or less.
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